To your True Love's kiss.
and
Until I fall in love.
are both shorter and disrupt the flow of the poem. Both lines do exactly that, but I love doing that even in my own poetry. It's a method of emphasis, so good job, because those two line were very meaningful to me.
Also in the last stanza,
My Lord, You now have heard my prayer,
And You can guide me through the dark.
I’ll be your faithful slave forever,
Until I fall in Love.
I espetially enjoy how yo use contridiction in the last line to give it emphasis. Honestly, the last line was so significant to me, that I thought that the poem should have been called "Until I fall in love." In the line before you say that you'll be His faithful slave forever, yet you then follow with "Until I fall in love." There lies the contradiction, and it is very effective for a climax. I also enjoy how at the begining of the stanza how you refer back to the poem, it gives the ending its own identity, and gives the reader a clear indication of the final stanza of the poem.
There's some amazing imagery in all the stanzas, especially the third and forth with the rose and the possom, and the touch so tender and sweet surrender.
You really got through to me with this poem, it was extreamely well written, and simple, and beautiful. Something that I've noticed as I've seen different works from artists, and this poem is not only a great example but helped me greatly in realizing this more fully, is that the beautiul pieces are often the simple ones. This poems was no exeption. Bless your soul, this poem was exquisite and beautiful. I feel I can relate to the poem, even though I've never experience a great religeous realization about my life. I felt warmed by the beauty and simplicity of you poem, thank you!