Young Writers Society

I think this is an extremely pretty piece! It makes me think of reluctance with combined lust.

This is a good one for sure. I really like your choice of language and description, I could clearly see the circumstances you were writing about and that's the idea right? Hehe, anyway, other than that, I just had to say that I'm not normally big on rhyming when I write, but this poem is one of the best ones that rhyme that I've seen in a long time...not on this site of course, this is only the third poem I've reviewed. I give this two thumbs up, and I'd love to read more things you've written!

I love this poem I lot. I think the imagery is beautifully done. I would love to nit-pick it, but I really can't. Any issues I have were either fixed or mentioned above. I think this is excellent.

I love how you write. There is a lot of passion in this poem.

I think this is great! I love the visuals and I love how it sounds like you're catching yourself in a moment, watching from third person which is far away from the very raw environment ur describing.

Very good imagery and rhyming. Perhaps we should not talk like this,
Tongues so laced with candid wish;
Or look into each other eyes,
And reading there such sweet demise.
I enjoyed this part very much. Keep on writing !

I absolutely love it, good job! Make some more, please.