Any thoughts and critiques are much appreciated! *Rated 16 for some language and mature subject matter
The Voice In My Head
I heard a voice inside my head
Calling to me from the Land of the Dead
Enticing me to join it in Hell
From where it was speaking in a voice quite fell
“Just a simple matter,” it hissed in my ear.
“Pull the trigger, and bam! You’re here!”
“One problem,” I said to the demon in my head,
“I don’t have a gun; I can’t shoot myself dead.”
“No matter that!” it said cheerfully.
“Just hang yourself from a nearby tree.”
“I don’t have a rope,” I said thoughtfully.
“And I’m not going to get one; I’m far too lazy.”
“Draw up the bathtub, fill it to the brim,
Then dunk yourself under and don’t try to swim.”
“I hate water; I’m like a cat.
Besides, I don’t want to go by that.”
“Then drive your car at the fastest speed
And go flying off a cliff; then you’re free!”
“What an expensive mess that would cost!
I’d rather do it quietly, with minimum loss.”
The demon pondered; it hemmed and hawed:
“How to snatch you from life and from God.”
“God?” I asked. “What’s He got to do with it?”
The demon sounded sly and said with some spirit,
“Nothing, of course, sir! Nothing at all!
Now what if you jumped and staged a great fall?”
“Shut up for a moment,” I said sternly.
“There’s something here you’re not telling me.”
Then I heard panic in the demon’s voice,
“I don’t have to tell you; it’s all my own choice!”
“I want to know now, and I won’t do anything
Until you tell me," I said, "so sing!”
The demon wailed, “He has a plan!
He’s got a life for you, you foolish man!
“You’re too stuck in the rut called depression
For anything He says to make an impression.
“If only you listened to His voice, not mine,
You’d hear something that’s truly divine!”
With that piece of news, I told the sly one,
“Go to Hell, leave me be, you damnable demon!”
It screeched loudly inside of my head,
And cried, “You’ll soon wish that you were dead!”
I paid it no mind, and quietly waited
For the one whom I wanted, my breath bated.
It was a while in coming, and at times I’d hear
A whisper of doubt sounding in my ear
But I finally learned how to block it out,
No matter how loud or clear it might shout
I was finally rewarded with a quiet voice
Saying, “Well done. You’ve made the right choice.
“You were tempted for some time by a demon of Hell
To end your life, and to sound the knell
“But if you did, you would have missed so much!
I have plans for you: life, wife, and such.
“And, most of all, joy; you would have missed it
If you had listened to that sly demon’s fit.”
My eyes were opened; I heard the call
And I realized that life’s not too bad after all.
