The Sonnet of Silent Death

element28001 wrote:Interesting use of words. I enjoyed the structure of the poem and I enjoyed reading it. Needs some editing, but most of what is needed has already been stated. Although, if you are content with this piece, then leave it and move on to the next one. Make that one just as good or even better. I look forward to reading more of your work.

THANK YOU!! Now that was a boost of confidence xD Do not worry I am editing it

I love it! Love it!! *dances around like a little girl* Nice apocalyptic mood and imagery, beautiful words. Hurrah!

Warrior Princess wrote:I love it! Love it!! *dances around like a little girl* Nice apocalyptic mood and imagery, beautiful words. Hurrah!

aww, aren't you a cute little one! I'm glad you like.. but I still have to fix it eih?

I like this. Lumi when he reviewed my poem said that poetry should have proper punctuation, like periods and the rest. This has good rhythm, although the flow seemed a bit stilted at times to me. (But maybe that was because I tried to sing it.)
Otherwise this was good. I liked it.

I really enjoyed the poem, I am sorry I do not have much advice for you about how to improve the poem. I think it is fine the way it is.

I hope you will check mine out. I would respect your opinion!

element28001 wrote:I really enjoyed the poem, I am sorry I do not have much advice for you about how to improve the poem. I think it is fine the way it is.

I hope you will check mine out. I would respect your opinion!

I will absolutely review yours, do pm me with the link and I shall review it at once.