My First Chapter Book (when I was six...) *cute*

Hey! I just remembered that I wrote this in China when I was about 6. This is the original version, no edits. I literally laughed out loud when I read it. Enjoy!!

Chapter 1
Once upon a time, there was a girl named Zoey. She was walking in a street with lots of green trees. She suddenly remembered she had a bad dream last night, but she could not remember what it was at all. Oh well, she thought, who cares! She walked and walked toward the sun.

Chapter 2
A hobo came up to Zoey. He had one eye-patch and rotten teeth. "You are in danger, young lady." He hobbled away.
Huh? thought Zoey.

Chapter 3
Suddenly, there was a tornado, big and black and scary! Ahh, yelled Zoey.

Haha, I'll try to find more if you guys like it!!

That was so cute, WritingWords! It is so funny the things little kids will come up with. Sometimes, they think of really good story premises. I honestly think you should elaborate on this and make it a really chapter book! Do you know how you wanted it to end?

Haha, thanks! Maybe I will...

This is soooo cute!

My eight year old says this.

Great story. Especially for a six year - old.

You know, you could really turn this into a good story. It's actually pretty good for a six-year-old!

Hello, Writing!

This was very cute and also very short. This could be a very good story if you added more description, imagery, and plot. This needs a lot more flesh on it's story bones if you want this to be something good. But, for the way it is now, this was amazing! My sister is six and she can hardly read or write now. Like I said, this is very cute and it made me laugh. Hobos know a lot, we should stop taking them for granted.

ReisePiecey!

Hey guys! Please "like" this if you think it is cute. I would really appreciate it!!

Again, please "like" this! I have never been on the Featured Works before, and I really want to see how it's like. Thanks!

Haha, this is really cute, it made me smile . Children's stories rule!

Anyway, keep the chapters coming! ^^

Hey there, WritingWords. =)

This is adorable. Melts my heart; even at six, you were writing brilliantly. What an imagination you must have - and ooh, you are twelve now, yes? Maybe it is time for you to revisit this story. Obviously, it would take a lot of work, but you could make this into a cute, cute chapter book. I would say "a real one" but this is real.
I did, however, have a few nitpicks. I won't comment on the writing itself - because, I would be evaluating a six year old, not your current self. Anyways, I have a feeling the name Zoey isn't right for this character. Maybe an "Amber" or "Tara"?
Well, this was very nice.
You'll have to let me see some of your current work some time.
x Mizz

Hello Writing Words

This was so cute and fun to read. I can't believe you wrote this when you were six. My six year old brother couldn't write something as good as this. If you were writing this when you were six I wonder what your writing now . Anyways great job and it would really great if you continued it. You could count on me reading it.

-lilgreendots

awwwww... it's soooo cute!

Sooooooooooo cute!!!! You could serious make this an actual story, though. I don't think i could write this well when i was six . . . you had very interesting ideas.

Thank you SO much, you guys! I can't believe how many likes this recieved!! I literally had my mouth gaped open when I saw the number. I hope it did make it on the Featured Works. I don't know, did anyone see it?

Many people encouraged me to develope this story into a cute chapter book. Well, should I? I'm afraid it's going to lose it's "cuteness" once I make it go into depth. I really don't know. Tell me what YOU think in the comments below!!

Once again, THANK YOU for the "likes"!!