Something That I Wrote When I Was Seven

gsppcrocks10 · 2010-08-01T05:19:47Z

So, I was going through my old documents and I found this lying around. I figured you guys would enjoy it. EDIT: Please stop trying to actually review this. I only posted it because I thought some people would get a laugh out of it. I know what could (and hopefully will, once I get the inclination to edit), be fixed, honest. I didn't edit this before I posted it, purposely. Okay? Thanks! LAVA LAND. A fantasy story By *** *** Illustrated by *** *** CHAPTER 1 Lava Land A girl named Lindsey was walking down the wet sidewalk and went into an antique store And asked where the bathroom was it’s in the back said the manager pointing thank you said Lindsey while she was washing her hands she noticed a odd looking person --- I cut off in the middle of a sentence and never got back to it, since I had the attention span of a goldfish, but... There you go.

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Sun Aug 01, 2010 7:57 pm

TheReader22 says... · Sun Aug 01, 2010 7:57 pm

This is amazing! You really started writing at a young age!

Lol, but seriously I remember the stories I used to write when I was little

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Sun Aug 01, 2010 8:52 pm

Mizzle says... · Sun Aug 01, 2010 8:52 pm

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Elinor Brynn wrote:You write a lot better then I did when I was seven, that's for sure. None of the stories I wrote even bordered on coherency.

Anyway, I love this!

I didn't even write stories when I was seven... I just drew pictures of cats.

Cats? Pshh. I drew pictures of fat, misshapen horses. =P

Crocks, this is cute. =D

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Mon Aug 02, 2010 2:25 am

alwaysbeininspired95 says... · Mon Aug 02, 2010 2:25 am

This just made my year. Seriously, i LOVE this. I wish i would have saved stuff from when I was a kid. I wrote my first "book" when I was four, and it was called "A Day at the Beach". Hahah this is brilliant though, it should be needlepointed on a pillow.

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Mon Aug 02, 2010 2:47 am

Lavvie says... · Mon Aug 02, 2010 2:47 am

Fantastic!!! A work of art, I must say. So many questions...

I WANT MORE!!!!

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Mon Aug 02, 2010 5:54 am

Waterlilygirl says... · Mon Aug 02, 2010 5:54 am

Now thats amazing! :smt063

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Mon Aug 02, 2010 3:40 pm

hero says... · Mon Aug 02, 2010 3:40 pm

The story is okay. What's even funnier are the comments.

This guy is so evil you could put him in between two slices of bread and call him an evil sandwich.

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Mon Aug 02, 2010 3:43 pm

Ruth says... · Mon Aug 02, 2010 3:43 pm

hero wrote:The story is okay. What's even funnier are the comments.

This.

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Tue Aug 03, 2010 4:51 pm

desiredanime25 says... · Tue Aug 03, 2010 4:51 pm

Hahaha I like it alot it keeps me guessing whats coming up next *lol*

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Tue Aug 03, 2010 5:38 pm

wookielover17 says... · Tue Aug 03, 2010 5:38 pm

Hi!!! Surprised to see me? I bet you are.

Well let me just say you had more of an attention span than I did!

But I agree with Irish! Somebody get a publisher we've got a hit!!!

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Tue Aug 03, 2010 11:58 pm

Nate says... · Tue Aug 03, 2010 11:58 pm

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Wed Aug 04, 2010 12:14 am

Jas says... · Wed Aug 04, 2010 12:14 am

Mizzle wrote:
Skins wrote:
Elinor Brynn wrote:You write a lot better then I did when I was seven, that's for sure. None of the stories I wrote even bordered on coherency.

Anyway, I love this!

I didn't even write stories when I was seven... I just drew pictures of cats.

Cats? Pshh. I drew pictures of fat, misshapen horses. =P

Crocks, this is cute. =D

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Fat, misshapen horses? Pssssssssssssshhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh. I drew blobs.

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Wed Aug 04, 2010 12:40 am

irishfire says... · Wed Aug 04, 2010 12:40 am

Blobs? Psssssssssssssssssssssssssshhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhhh I drew pictures of dead squirrels that had gotten run over on the street in front of my house. (No joke I gave one to my teacher.)

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Wed Aug 04, 2010 12:55 am

Jas says... · Wed Aug 04, 2010 12:55 am

Gah. That reminds me of the sixth sense, when the little kid drew pictures of dead people and people dying and stuff.

I am nothing
but a mouthful of 'sorry's, half-hearted
apologies that roll of my tongue, smoothquick, like 'r's
or maybe like pocket candy
that's just a bit too sweet.

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