Don't count on me

Don't know,don't care,don't count on me
A phrase I hear everyday
I guess it's so easy to say


Don't know,don't care,don't count on me
Don't know.don't care,don't count on me
It's easy as a pie for everyone
It's hard to deny I'm the only one
who seems to be no good at pie


Don't know,don't care,don't count on me
A chicken can lay
While it's starting to say


Don't know,don't care,don't count on me
Don't know,don't care,don't count on me
It's easy as a pie for everyone
It's hard to deny I'm the only one
Who seems to be no good at pie

I think that these lyrics could use some major revisions.

It's easy as a pie for everyone
It's hard to deny I'm the only one
who seems to be no good at pie

I would not use this. What does I'm the only one who seems no good at pie mean?

A chicken can lay

Why is this in here? I would not use this either. I think you need to come up with a better saying. Hopefully my review helps. Have a great day. Fiction

Hey there tamtam,

When writing a poem or lyrics, you don't need to rhyme the lines. Getting rhyming right is extremely tricky, and something that not even the best poets ever really master. Rather, concentrate instead on the beat and rhythm of the lines; that is, how many syllables are there per line?

Also, make sure that the poem makes sense. As fiction903 pointed out, you have some lines that do not fit.

In any case, I hope you keep writing.