Three Letters

If I had to say three letters,
To you before I die,
Then I would have to pick,
First I then L then Y.
They stand for how I feel,
And that is more than true.
Three simple little letters,
Meaning I Love You.

FireandIce326 wrote:If I had to say three letters,
To you before I die.
Then I would have to pick,
First I then L then Y.
They stand for how I feel,
And that is more then true.
Three simple little letters,
Meaning I Love You.

This was a cute poem. I liked it. A very feel-good poem I like your rhyming scheme-- it is quite different. Nothing I can see wrong

Lavvi

FireandIce326 wrote:If I had to say three letters,
To you before I die.
Then I would have to pick,
First I then L then Y.
They stand for how I feel,
And that is more then true.
Three simple little letters,
Meaning I Love You.

I don't say this a lot--but I loved your poem. Your flow is nice, and I like the short quality of the poem. Short && sweet. The only nitpick I had is when you said "To you before I die. Then..."
It should be
"To you before I die,
then..."
Or at least, that's how I feel it should be.

Still, nice work.

-Mizz-

oh my word that is sooo cute!!

I really enjoyed this piece. I think its "than" rather than "then" in one of your lines towards the end. lol
I thought your rythym was excellent and I felt like your poem was readable and easy to understand.
Good work.

Haha. How quaint! Short and sweet; I liked it. The thing is, if you were dying and you pulled your lover close and whispered "I...L...Y" it's quite possible they might not get it. But a nice little poem nonetheless!

In general, I though it was very well written. It's straight to the point which is refreshing to see in poetry. The feeling is easily conveyed to the reader. Though it talks about a subject (love) that is very common in poetry, I thought the play with letters was original. This poem was simple and short while still giving that sense of the love that the writer feels, I applaud you for that. When it comes to criticism, I actually can find any currently. However, I might wake up in the middle of the night later on and remember something I should have criticized! If I do I'll be sure to let you know. Nevertheless, right now, I have nothing to say. It was a very well written, nice flow and rhythm. Good job!

I really loved this poem. The rhyme scheme is really nice and your play on the words I Love You was great. It was a cute and simply poem that was really cute and I enjoyed reading it.
-xangeleighfshox

I love this poem. I love the flow, the rhythm, the rhyming ; I just love it so much. It's cute short and heartfelt. One of the best poems I have read so far. I enjoyed reading it. I didn't spot any mistakes *thumbs up*.

It was simple and yet so long. So beautiful....


I realy realy loved it. (Yeah I guess I said that so many times:)

I enjoyed this poem. Short and sweet uplifting poem.I think it sums up the love in everybody and that before the death or the last thing you want to tell the people the mean the most to you is that you love them, I liked how used rhyme in the poem to create a quick and upbeat tempo. I enjoyed the simplicity of the poem and the simple message obvious form the start.

Thanx XD

Hiya,

This is a really cute poem and I absolutley adore how simplistic it is. It's one of those poems that is really touching despite not going into too much detail. However, I did have a few comments.

First, the whole three letters theme to your poem seems a bit unrealistic and just a way to stretch out the length of your poem. Who would really think of the letters to a phrase before the words? Why would they say the letters to the person instead of the words? I would just get straight to the words. That way you can use the extra space to describe more of the circumstances. For instance, why would the narrator wait till right before he died to say these words to the subject? Why not now? Explain to us, is he/she dying from sickness or injury? Are they of advanced age?

The second thing I wanted to mention to you is your grammar. It's very school thought and not even correct. The same rules of grammar should apply to poetry as they do prose. So, you do not need to capitalize the first letter of every new line, or have a mark of punctuation at the end of every one.

FireandIce326 wrote:If I had to say three letters,
To you before I die

Think about the comma placed between 'letters' and 'to'. Your indicating that there should be a pause, and reading it aloud sounds really awkward. This happens throughout your piece quite a few times. I'm not going to go into the details about comma rules, but you can view a really good article about it here

Overall, it was good, but just needs a bit of polishing. Good luck revising, and feel free to PM me if you have any questions!

-Elinor x

This is an absolutely lovely poem. It had a clear message, great rhyming scheme and rhythm. not much else to say about that.

-Ace

Oh.My.Word. What a cute poem!

OK, So when I first read it, I didn't see it as cute, I saw it as serious, like death and dying and last words to a lover. But, after reading te commentts and going back to the poem I saw it differently, like it was a like a little girl to her mother.

So anyway, back to the poem, and sorry about any of the spelling.

The good bits: So simple, so short and so sweet! So, the message was strong and clear. There were emotions there without it being to personal. It was wuite generalised but I liked it that way,

The bad bits: Hmm, well, uumm, to be honest I don't really think there were any bad bits. It was a bit like reading a really good book, you wished it would have been longer, but you know that would have spoiled the book.

- Hayleypoole

Hey! I really like this poem! I agree with the others, it is nice and simple, but has a very good meaning behind it =). Very well done! Nothin bad to say here about your poem, well at least nothin that's already been said that is haha. I hope to see more!