Friendship's Timeline

8 posts
Random avatar
Gender Female
Points 890
Reviews 1160
Friendship's Timeline
By Elizabeth Mathers
12/23/05


We have come a long way from
Spitting contests to Barbie shows
Where I would always end up making one die
And you would always make the man favor your doll

We certainly have passed the stages of
Yelling at boy toys, idolizing musicians
Who would smash their guitars against the stage
With hopes one day we would be just like them
And have blond and green hair and twenty-three piercings

We are far behind from Powerpuff girls
Now trapped into Daria and Dagrassi
Music we don’t understand, but we don’t care,
The music’s beat is all we need to get by

Our sleepovers used to be hours on end playing
Now they’re hours just hanging out and movies
Do we mind? As we grow older,
Can we tell? How everything has changed!

This shooting star that passed through the skies last night
I only wished to remember times of innocence
One more time of laughter and playing childish games
And in the end, knowing you’re beside me, is just the remedy


~_~_~_~ To Tiana N. Tucker ~_~_~_~
Last edited by Elizabeth on Tue Dec 27, 2005 9:43 am, edited 1 time in total.




Random avatar
Gender None specified
Points 1212
Reviews 241
wow- it's really awesome because it's true- i haven't really thought about when i was younger in a while *reminisces*... simple times... :wink: x




User avatar
Gender Female
Points 890
Reviews 131
oh gee...barbie...that was a while ago *looks around nervously and hides barbie under the desk* lmao....thats really cool, brings back memorys.. great stuff!
Trying to survive "sweet sixteen."
---
<love> is sweet -suicide- and {[you]} are my LATEST a.t.t.e.m.p.t




User avatar
Gender Female
Points 6523
Reviews 657
Awww! :)

I like how you gradually progress from little kid games to the present, but always with your friend.

'And have blond and green hair and twenty-three piercings' is my favorite line. So funny! :D
Jennafina's Love Your Body Already Dammit Campaign

forum353.html

(To find out what it really is, just click.)




User avatar
Gender Female
Points 9692
Reviews 3900
This line is a little awkward: "The music’s beat is all we need to get by"

Also, you need to change the title so it doesn't say "Timline."

But otherwise, good. It makes me nostalgic.
Ubi caritas est vera, Deus ibi est.

"The mark of your ignorance is the depth of your belief in injustice and tragedy. What the caterpillar calls the end of the world, the Master calls the butterfly." ~ Richard Bach

Moth and Myth <- My comic! :D




User avatar
Gender Female
Points 1040
Reviews 493
I liked this. :P it was so true, but you stated it plainly. Just like, "this is how it is..." it's a good poem, I enjoyed it. I don't really have any critiques...it was good. haha lol sorry im not much help.




User avatar
Gender Female
Points 1040
Reviews 202
It was good, it really makes the reader look back while reading it. :)
Real poetry are those with the best words in the best order

~~~~~~~~Mandy~~~~~~~~~




Random avatar
Gender Male
Points 1823
Reviews 665
This is great TBR and you say your no good at poetery, i think your magic.
We get off to the rhythm of the trigger and destruction. Fallujah to New Orleans with impunity to kill. We are the hidden fist of the free market.
We are the ink, we are the quill.
[The Ink And The Quill (Be Afraid) - Anti-Flag]



A memorandum isn't written to inform the receiver, but to protect the writer.
— Dean Acheson