If only I was as good as writing as you are when I was ohhhh so young
I wish the last line rhymed more... but that's all that I can think of.
I like it. I dig the self destructive vibe, but it's not a I'm freaking out vibe it's a this is how it is kinda calm and I really like that in dealing with such a seriously intense subject, it makes it more serious when you get that there is a kind of detachment to life it's almost morbid, almost.
Well you get a thumbs up from me.