The Black Widow

This is just a prologue to some mystery book I'm thinking of working on, let me know what you think! Thanks!

She stands before you, alone but surrounded. Her arms tattooed with the tears of those who have fallen before her, she's clothed in the finest of silks. Her voice is like a Siren's, terrifying but so alluring. She sees but she does not hear, she hears but she does not see. She's anger and joy, she's hate and she's love, she's wrath and she's sadness. She's all of these, yet she's nothing, a shadow.
She's what you fear most when the lights go out, yet at moments of despair, you cry to her for a quicker end. She is all of nothing, and nothing at all.
Her skin is of ivory, her eyes sweet emeralds, her hair is of spun ink.
To man she is the end, to others the beginning of forever, her name; La Vedova Nera.

Mysteries = awesome.

I think, however, that I would like less contradictions and more conflict... just dive into the plot! I think it'll be a much better hook than this, if only because we have a better idea of what's going on. Besides, this right now reminds me of a scene from the "A Shot in the Dark" when Inspector Clouseau says, "I believe everything and I believe nothing. I suspect everyone and I suspect no one."

Or if you need to come up with a description for this woman, take a page out of G.K. Chesterton (a fabulous mystery writer!) and describe her very concretely. That way, it'll give us an eerie feeling, yet still be completely awesome.

Still! Mysteries are awesome. You should definitely continue this!

Hey there. This was nicely written but I understood nothing. The style of your writing is perfect like in second person but it seemed so much of a mess.

She sees but she does not hear, she hears but she does not see.

There might be a mystery to it which I might not have been able to get. So for me it was a total no-show.

I think you have an interesting piece but don't make it that mysterious for the writers. Try to soothe up a bit. And try to be more direct in the beginning so that the reader gets to understand a bit. Take Snoink's advice.

Hope I helped.