Her Dawn

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Okay everyone I locked my last prologue and edited it but now I cannot unlock it so I just have to make a new topic...sorry


A woman’s tiny figure lay in a pale green field full of critters and insects. Bees buzzed
around her face, crickets sang and danced,and mosquitoes flew around her wanting to taste her blood. A silk emerald dress grazed her body, and a mass of curly black hair fell over her face as a soft breeze blew by. Her russet skin reflected tiny water droplets from the night before when she first arrived at this location. Everything remained the same until a fair skinned woman walked through an opening of pine trees. Waves of honey blond hair bounced as she walked towards the damsel in the grass. She caressed her arms smiling to herself, and cackled throwing her head back.

"Oh Mrs.Wata you are so clumsy" she smiled deviously," Did you really think I would let you go?"

Expecting no response she continued stroking the woman's arm smelling the tempting fragrance.

"Hmm I've always wondered what you would taste like" she wafted the woman's arm and caught another scent.

"Please don't do this" the woman lying on the ground pleaded feebly." I thought you were better than this."

She slowly turned to face the blonde woman; she could barely move from the torture she endured the night before.

"I'm sorry I'm not traitor " she hissed harshly before tearing and relishing the woman's body.

"Stop it please!" she yelled for clemency but the woman continued dining on her body.

After a few minutes the only thing left was a corpse completely removed of skin and flesh and a woman wiping her mouth before disappearing.
Last edited by nativecatcher on Mon May 03, 2010 12:10 am, edited 1 time in total.
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Next time, bug somebody in green. We can unlock it for you. :)

Anyway... there is this damsel lying in this grass with lots of insects whizzing around. She's been there for a while and has water on herself and so on, so she's obviously undisturbed. And then another lady (presumably a vampire) comes and bites her... on the arm?

I don't know, it seems a little random! The damsel is kind of asking for it, if you know what I mean. Also, does she expect to be heard? By your last line, it's kind of implying that someone hears her, but as far as I can see, nobody hears her. Dilemma!

So yeah. It seems really random now, lol. I expect more. :)
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Actually the woman isn't a vampire, but if it's getting kind of confusing I'll try to make it more clear. I will try to post more also :lol:
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