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Last edited by ThePowerOutage on Sun Mar 21, 2010 4:31 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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Hi Power!

Is English your first language? If it is, I'm surprised, because you seem to be making a lot of silly grammatical errors. like not putting spaces between commas or periods, and ending your sentences in wierd places.

Also, this piece was pretty boring. It's more or less a description of an closed cafe with a bit of story thrown in at the last minute. While your descriptions are nice, something like this should be part of a larger story. Why is the cafe closing? I'm hungry for more.

PM me if you have any questions.

-Elinor

All our dreams can come true — if we have the courage to pursue them.

-- Walt Disney



Grief, I’ve learned, is really just love. It’s all the love you want to give, but cannot. All that unspent love gathers up in the corners of your eyes, the lump in your throat, and in that hollow part of your chest. Grief is just love with no place to go.
— Jamie Anderson