Is English your first language? If it is, I'm surprised, because you seem to be making a lot of silly grammatical errors. like not putting spaces between commas or periods, and ending your sentences in wierd places.
Also, this piece was pretty boring. It's more or less a description of an closed cafe with a bit of story thrown in at the last minute. While your descriptions are nice, something like this should be part of a larger story. Why is the cafe closing? I'm hungry for more.
PM me if you have any questions.
-Elinor
All our dreams can come true — if we have the courage to pursue them. -- Walt Disney
