Mirror, Mirror

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If I were to see myself
as you see me
I would be an ugly thing.
I would be a reflection of words and opinions
all wrong
jumbled together to make a
mismatched, misinformed misanthropist;
blind in both eyes,
closeminded, and
open-mouthed.

There would be no beauty
in my face
no cohesion of form
or semblance of realism.
I would be a cubist photograph
with three ears and
no legs
a thing to be pitied,
for it could never be
whole.

If I were to look at myself
through your eyes
I would be an ugly thing.
I would have no tangible essence, no
humanity or love.
I would be an ice-sculpture
crafted by a child
with no conception of the human form
and you would shatter me
without bothering
to pick up the pieces.

Why do you see
something so horrible?
I am not wretched.
I am not ugly.
Why do you look at me
with such
disgust
in your eyes
(metaphorically speaking)
when I have said nothing, done nothing
that could possibly be construed
as insane.

Perhaps, if you were to look at me
the way I see me
you would find that
the person you are seeing
is yourself.
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There is only one success: to be able to spend your life in your own way, and not to give others absurd maddening claims upon it. (C D Morley)




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HAHA!

*ahem*

I relate too much to this poem. It appealed to me, especially the content, thus I liked it very very much. It's nice to see that I'm not alone. ;)
Ubi caritas est vera, Deus ibi est.

"The mark of your ignorance is the depth of your belief in injustice and tragedy. What the caterpillar calls the end of the world, the Master calls the butterfly." ~ Richard Bach

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Just one grammar thing:
Why do you look at me
with such
disgust
in your eyes
(metaphorically speaking)
when I have said nothing, done nothing
that could possibly be construed
as insane.

You start with 'why' but don't end with a question. I also didn't particularly like that sentence, but it's probably just me.

It was slightly cliche at the end, which made me dislike the last stanza. But I did like reading the poem. I thought the images were great.



I'm so confused I've Turned To erratic Capitalisation?
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