This is a great short story; something about it just has that heir of mystery and exciting foreshadowing. Your somewhat-simple style for some reason also makes it feel really personal. The only thing I would recommend is not saying "the man" so much when you talk about him in the graveyard, because it makes the section seem a little repetative (sorry, kind of picky about little things like that). Still, great!
Reading is one form of escape. Running for your life is another. ~Lemony Snicket
Ooh! What a fantastic story! And by fantastic, I mean it has wonderful fantasy aspects with odd, quirky details that make it all so much better! I totally "liked" it.
My main comment would be to explain the infamous shrimp tail incident.
I would also make the part where she sees herself wayyyy more dramatic. But then again, I might just be a drama queen. Still! Awesome story!
Ubi caritas est vera, Deus ibi est.
"The mark of your ignorance is the depth of your belief in injustice and tragedy. What the caterpillar calls the end of the world, the Master calls the butterfly." ~ Richard Bach
Ahh, if only all stories were this good. I loved the description, the sense of anitcipation, the content. I like how the emotions reflect themselves and the flow of this story. You can almost visualize this happening, a desolate grey graveyard where all that inhabits it or ever passes by is the rain or wind. Thanks for the story, it's wonderful. -qtbubblegirl
I'm not bad at ANYTHING... I'm bad at everything (but we can always pass that off as being very inexperienced, right?). Know thee not, when sarcasm knocks at your door? ~_'the Qt How random is this signature anyway. I have two brothers. One's imaginary. Yosh.I'd say I like you but then I'd be lying.
Still! Awesome story! 
