Crit the person above you!

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Okay... a new twist. For the person above you, find one work you think is interesting and crit it. Then so on, so forth...

Don't critique the story here... just put the title of the story or poem here so others can take a look -- if they want. ;)
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This is a great idea! are we supposed to post the crit in this thread, or just say what we critiqued?
The robbed that smiles, steals something from the thief. ~William Shakespeare, Othello
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^ A World Away, by Duskglimmer

Something like this, lol. :P
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^^ Happy Chicken, by Snoink, lol.




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^^^^ Koani and the Bandits: part 1, by Jennafina.

okay... just wondering...
The robbed that smiles, steals something from the thief. ~William Shakespeare, Othello
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^^ Cliff Edge (13+), by Duskglimmer

(great idea, Snoink)
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^^^^ Erasure, by Matt Bellamy

(Yeah, Snoink, great idea! I really like this thread... as if you couldn't notice by the number of times I've posted in here already)
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^^ Silence, by Duskglimmer.

I tried to say what hadn't been said! :D
Never interrupt your enemy when he's making a mistake... unless it's to remind him that he won't fail... he just won't kill you.




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^I was in Hell, by forest of the nightengale.
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^Koani and the Bandits, part 1, by Jennafina
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^^^^ Letters from Prison, by Snoink
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i thought you were shallow, but then i fell in deep.




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^ JESUS WAS GOTHER THAN YOU
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The Stalker After Me (parody)

Okay, so technically it was Snoink's sister who wrote it, but meh.
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