Letter from a possesive vampire

My dearest...
I've watched you for a long time... (About almost all you're life)

I want you all for myself... (Do you have a boyfriend?!)

I only wish no man has captured you're heart (I'LL TEAR HIM APART!!!)

For you're beauty only belongs to me... (oh sooo true... )

You're a sight for sore eyes... (AAARGHHH my eyes!!)

I remember the time you fell and cut your cheek (What a wonderful shade of red...)

When you bled... My heart cried (I couldn't take a taste!!)

For now I shall bid farewell...(Heh heh heeeehh)

But when we meet I hope we are alone... (Have I sharpened my fangs yet??)

See you soon... (I can't wait!! Hehee)

From Your secret admirer (the very first one)

Hey chanchan!

This is funny! I giggled through it... just when he starts to sound evil, he acts weird and spastic. And come on, that's pretty hilarious!

Just one thing... there's a difference between "you're" and "your"!

Examples of each:

"You're so beautiful!"

Notice how "you're" is a contraction of "you are."

"I want your awesome writing skills!"

Notice how "your" is a possessive word.

Anyway, nice to see your poetry! Good luck!

This made me giggle. XD

(About almost all your life)

As Snoink already mentioned, there is a huge difference between "you're" and "your". Even with a spelling/grammar checker, you'll have to be sure to carefully proofread your work because this is one of several common errors spelling/grammar checkers don't pick up.

From Your secret admirer (the very first one)

In letters, the complimentary close (in this case, "From") is always on a separate line and ends with a comma. In letter format, this line should be:

From,
Your secret admirer (the very first one)

In addition to that, the parenthetical aside at the end made the poem feel a bit incomplete, as if there was something else coming after it. I would suggest rephrasing the line to:

Your secret (and very first) admirer

It feels more like an ending, doesn't it?

Sorry I didn't laugh, I got confused, didn't know if the purpose was to be funny. I guess I am just a bad sport or something. The Line things ( ) got on my nerves. Sorry.

-Flower-

Haha, I loved this in a strange way. It made me giggle.

Obviously there is the difference between your and you're, but that's been mentioned. I was also going to point out the ending, but, again, Kyl did that for me.

See you soon... (I can't wait!! Hehee)

I think that the 'hehee' isn't really necessary here, but it's your call!

*snerks*

Nice one!

~Amy

Hey, Chan! Nice to meet you.

Okay, so this made me smile...and I'm having a pretty rough day so that's like a whole fit of laughter right now. Lol. YWS is always such a happy little place.

Yeah, and I'd like to point out the difference between your and you're. You're= you are. Your=your dog, your house, your money, etc. etc.
The hehee on the last line isn't really needed, but I guess you're the writer and can decide that.
Well. Tata.
-Mizzzzzle