Trapped

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Hello, everybody! This is my first storybook so we'll see how this goes.

In Trapped, a small underwater mining business off of the Pacific discovers an oddly impossible to widen crack through which they can see faraway, gleaming substances that may be priceless metals. However, the crack is just small enough none of the divers can come through.

Thinking it the only solution, the owner of the enterprise convinces his son to bring some friends down and explore the cave.

After the story gets through a few posts with brief introductory material, and everyone has gotten through the crack, we'll get to the interesting part.

When all of the teenagers get through the crack, an undersea quake will begin. The crack will be sealed up. However, a tube from one of the boats above still juts through, constantly pulsing out oxygen. Here, the divers can refill their air tanks, if they hold their breath while they disengage the system.

There are plenty of fish, and the characters will find a small air pocket to eat in. The pocket will have a strange freshwater pool.

So, that's basic survival.

At the floor of the massive, submerged cavern, an ancient city awaits. Nobody knows what is down there, but they soon will.

Rules:

-No gory, extreme violence
-No sexual content
-Other YWS Rules, of course
-Have fun!

Now, you have the option of taking the role of a diver, one of the mysterious guardians of the city, or both. Here are the forms:

Diver
Trapped and unsure, the divers don't know what to do. They turn to the ancient city, hoping it might have means of escape.

Name:
Age:
Background:
Personality:
Attributes:
Other:

Guardian
Skulking in the blackness of the ancient city for thousands of years, these intelligent, water-breathing humanoids feel it is their duty to guard the city's secrets.

Title:
Personality:
Attributes:
Other:

So, what are the secrets of this ancient city? Post a character and decide yourself!
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Diver

Name: Ora Vantin

Age: 15

Background: She became friends with the owner of the enterpirses son when they were very young. They went to preschool together becoming good friends from the beginning. Ora's life is surrounded by warfare when she was forced to leave E as a refugee when she was two years of age.

Personality: Childish, bubbly, over excited, happy and caring

Attributes: Brown hair that falls just below shoulder blades in an olden day style which she cannot help. The top part until it gets past her ears which is dead straight turns into a ringlets on the other half. She has chocolate brown eyes and a tan complexion with a slim build.

Other: She can use a bow and arrow and has knowledge in fighting from her father who use to own his own dojo. Though she acts innocent and frail she can cause quite a punch.
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This sounds cool! I'll be a guardian. I'll post my profile later. :D
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This sound promising

Diver

Trapped and unsure, the divers don't know what to do. They turn to the ancient city, hoping it might have means of escape.



Name: Aisha Batara

Age: 16

Background: One of the son's friends. Always up for adventure. Basic family, mom, dad, younger brother, older sister. Not much to her backround.

Personality: Sweet, shy, naive, innocent, trusting when your her friend. Cruel, sarcastic, brutal, dark, intimidating and menacing when your her enemy. You sincerely DONT want to be her enemy. VERY pretty and VERY flirtatous but also incredibly smart

Attributes: DARK brown hair, DARK brown eyes, tanish skin, arabian descent.

Other: She is a red belt (this comes after black belt) and can fight VERY well. She is also a pryro. That means she can make weapons (mostly bombs, guns) out of almost anything. This is not a superpower, it's just like how some people are good artists or good dancers, she's good at blowing things up :) She also has an amazing voice.
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Sounds good...

Name: Thaniel Bently

Age: 15

Background: One of the son's friends, Thaniel had a poor life while he was young. He doesn't like to talk about it much.

Personality: Thaniel is outgoing and loves to be the center of attention. Friendly with almost everyone, except for the people that he gets...a feeling about.

Attributes: Tall, with spiky red hair, green eyes, and freckles.


Other: Up for love, and is excellent with any kind of blade.
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Guardian:

Title: Alicia

Personality: Is cruel to the divers to begin with because she is jealous of them and their freedom to explore above the water. She is quite dark and lonely at times but when you get to know her she is loyal and true.

Attributes: Green eyes and Hazel coloured hair that falls to her waist. Her lips are always blue and her fingernails change colour depending on her mood.

Other: She is as I have said jealous of the divers but she soon gets to like them paticularly the boys :smt002 . She wears a mask which covers half of her face and it is blue. She also carrys a blue staff which she uses to fight it has a sapphire on the top end. She can use magic which she chooses to use for good and to clear up personal arguements. She also has no idea about the secret of the city as her father has decided to guard her from that knowledge.

By the way this sounds great! :D
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I'm glad you guys think this is good!

I added a few things to the first post that I meant to put there in the first place. There's the rules, but more importantly, anybody who wants to can take on a character for the other side as well. There's no obligation, of course, but if you want to you can post/ edit your old post for a character of the opposing side of the first one.

Here's my characters:

Diver:
Name:Angleson('Angler' to his friends as a joke referencing the deep- sea enterprise) Caler
Age:15
Background: The son of the owner of the mining enterprise, always felt like his father pushed him too far to do things for his father's benefit. He would often do odd jobs for him throughout the boats and submarines his father owned and became extremely handy with mechanical devices.
Personality: is almost instantly likable but has an almost too high opinion of himself. This often blinds him to quite obvious dangers. He tries to be the hero, but never seems to realize he isn't always the one to act.
Attributes: Short, brown hair. Freckled face with blue eyes.
Other:No good at fighting. However, he still does his best(and then goes too far...)

Guardian:
Title: Xzah
Personality: Where the other guardians guard the city obsessively, Xzah takes it another step forward. He never strays from the city, but he keeps a close eye on the divers
Attributes: Seaweed- appearing hair. Sharp nose, and black eyes.
Other: Carries about a small rune he found in the city once. The Guardians are forbidden to touch the city, so it is odd the most loyal of them all would do such a thing.
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Diver

Trapped and unsure, the divers don't know what to do. They turn to the ancient city, hoping it might have means of escape.



Name: Avery Thomson

Age: 15

gender: Female

Background: Avery's parents weren't ready for a child, and they didn't quite know how to take care of one. They found it hard to keep up with Avery's constant climbing, diving, and extra curricular activities. They always wanted her to use her brains, constantly giving her tutors, which she chased away. When she was 12 they gave her to her aunt and uncle, who has been supporting with what she has wanted to do. Her uncle is friends with Anglers father, when they met they became good friends. She's smart as well.

Personality: Caring, kinda jocky, Bright, and easy to get along with, her personality is flexible.

Attributes: long Black hair to her mid back, petite, slender curvy, deep blue eyes, pale complexion.

Other: up for love, already mentioned loves diving, climbing and much more. She loves to write, dance and sing, she just doesn't like to show her artsy side.
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Can we start this soon? *makes puppy eyes*
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yeah! When are we starting? Like tomorrow...or today....or now...*winkwink nudgenudge*
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RedBird wrote:Can we start this soon? *makes puppy eyes*


jasminebells wrote:yeah! When are we starting? Like tomorrow...or today....or now...*winkwink nudgenudge*


Yep, we'll get started now. I was a little sick last night and so I wasn't online. Sorry!

I guess I'll start it off...

Angler

I groaned again. Was my father really going to make me do this?

The submarine I was in was trundling slowly toward my inevitable destination. Me, and my friends.

We had been sent to explore a small crack in the ocean floor. The miners of my father's enterprise had been unable to open it further, and it seemed that we were the only ones that could fit through and collect some potentially useful minerals.

So, weeks of rigorous testing over, I was finally there. The sub slowed to a stop. I peered out a porthole and could just make out a faint, dark line in the seabed.
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Thaniel,

I slip into my diving gear as the sub slowly stops, feet above the ocean floor. Good thing it wasn't that deep here, I suppose, or else we'd all be crushed into pulp. I turn to remark on this to Angler, but he looks very annoyed.

"Ahhhh, come on, Angler, it's not that bad, really. I mean, you dad could be making you do repair work. What's life without a little risk,eh?"

"Sure,"
And remember...A portkey can be any sort of harmless object...A football...or a dolphin.
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Avery

I walked into the room where the two friends were conversing. "Life without a little risk is safe, which sometimes makes it boring." I exclaimed with a small smile. "Cheer up Angler. We have your back." I told him with a slight nudge. "I should be the one watching your back. Your my friends, I need to take care of you so please try not to do anything stupid." He said almost playfully with a small smile. "Try is the key word." I joked. He rolled his eyes and returned to his previous thoughts.

I had already slipped on the diving suit, waiting for the command as to when we put on the gear and head out into the ocean. I glanced over at Thaniel. I had met a few of Anglers friends, but his face was somewhat new to me. I have seen him around before, yes, said hello maybe once or twice, but never actually met him. "I'm Avery." I introduced myself, sticking my hand out in greeting.
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I am going to make up a diver character as well because I really want to get sruck into this!

Name: Cate (spelt with a C because she likes her individuality)
Age: 15
Background: One of the sons friends, she goes around with the group because she likes Thaniel. She lives with her mum and sister because her dad died whilst diving off of the Cornish coast when his equipment failed. But she goes diving with the others anyway because Thaniel goes.
Personality: Flirty, funny and over confident (except when it comes to diving) girly and but when they get stuck she becomes vunerable and scared.
Attributes: Blond highlighted straight hair, Blue eyes and is very skinny.
Other: She is jealous of any girl who likes Thaniel.
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Thaniel,

"I'm Avery," he says holding out his hand. I shake it.

"Thaniel," I reply, smiling, "So you're going with us as well, then?"

He grins, "Yep!"

"Great. It takes many more than one to keep Angler from getting in over his head, if you get me."

Avery laughs, "Yeah, you could say that."
And remember...A portkey can be any sort of harmless object...A football...or a dolphin.
~Snape, AVPM

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