Senseless Love

haha (: thanks for the feedback and flash from the past lol.

I think your poem here is very well written. For this being an early work as you dont write poetry, Id say you did acceptionally well. I dont think you overused sense, as you used the word in a different way in lines five and six. Also since that is the name of the piece, it is expected to be in the writing so seeing it in there in the different ways just fit. The only thing I would work on is matching your stanza form. Whether it be four or five, the poem would read cleaner and smoother if they matched but other than that, great job!

I feel it fly and fall about me,
But is it really what I see?
To me, it is not.
But to them, to thee?

This is a poem that makes little sense,
Like love itself in a sense,
So grasp of what you can
Understand for you may need
What you so-truly understand.

In the world of love a heart
Is like a bullet of mystery,
Ponder a moment and it’ll go,
Don’t ponder at all and
You’ll miss the show.

I understand that this is senseless,
A rant, a deception, nonsense.
But is this not a description of
What love is and a poem is not,
I don’t ask you to understand;
Merely to grasp what you do
So-truly understand…

has to be the best bit

Thanks for just quoting a chunk of the poem...?

Locked as this is a September topic. Old aged stuff, guys.