LordLoredaen's Art Thread

This thread is for some pictures I drew for my "STAR WARS: The Purge" novel, hope you like them!
(p.s. these pictures came before I started writing the book)

Ryle Vao, Jedi Knight


Ryle Vao when he was succumbed to the dark side.


Ryle Vao in the Shien start position.


Ryle Vao training on Felucia. (One of my favourites!)


A close up picture of Ryle's Lightsaber

Hello Daydreamer here:

These are pretty good, my favorite is the one of the lightsaber. I love the detail. Very cool!

My only complaints with these would be that in a few of the pictures, your character is slightly out of proportion, especially in his lower half.

I'm somewhat of a Star Wars fan and when I first saw these, I thought you had drawn the character Kit Fisto.
Is this character made up? I've never heard of him, and if he is, did you base him off of Kit Fisto?

Either way, nice drawings!

-Daydreamer

I'm not even going to begin with how much I enjoyed this xD

The face is disproportional in all of these. Maybe pause in the movie to get a good look at him, might help. His head is much too flat, and his eyes are totally different. Get a closer look at your character. His face is the best in the second one.

I like the lightsaber. A lot *steals*

I can't even review this further XD Made extremely happy. Congrats.

Kamas

Hey there!

Nice drawings! I recommend going over human figure - or should I say alien figure- a bit because the joints are a bit rounded and soft where they should be sharper. Try reforming that a bit.

You're not bad; I would recommend strengthening lines to make your drawings pop more. The light saber is truly amazing. I like that one alot. Keep it up; I'd like to see more.

June

Hello there Lord. These are very good, but I do have a few problems.

Firstly, you should re-size your photos before you post them. They're extremely huge right now and very hard to look at and review. I have a really small computer, so that makes it even harder.

Secondly, the drawings are on lined paper. There isn't necessarily anything wrong with that, but the lines are generally a distraction and they don't help you if you want your work to be taken seriously.

Thirdly, your backgrounds weren't very clean, as you could see the marks of your eraser, which doesn't bode to well if you're trying to tell people you're an artist.

When it came down to the actual drawing, the quality was great. I especially love the last photo, and I wish I had handwriting like yours.

That's all for now.
PM if you have any questions.

d@ydre@mer27 wrote:Hello Daydreamer here:

These are pretty good, my favorite is the one of the lightsaber. I love the detail. Very cool!

My only complaints with these would be that in a few of the pictures, your character is slightly out of proportion, especially in his lower half.

I'm somewhat of a Star Wars fan and when I first saw these, I thought you had drawn the character Kit Fisto.
Is this character made up? I've never heard of him, and if he is, did you base him off of Kit Fisto?

Either way, nice drawings!

-Daydreamer

Yeah, I'm working on the proportion thing... I'm really just an amateur artist, heck I don't even have a proper sketchbook!

Yeah, this character's made up, he's supposed to be distantly related to Mission Vao from the Knights of the Old Republic game, and maybe related to Shado Vao from the Legacy comics...
No, he's not based off of Kit Fisto... he's more based off of Shado Vao (or, if you've never read the comic, an uglier example is Bib Fortuna, from Episode VI: Return of the Jedi, though I've tried to make him look handsomer.). It's hard to draw a decent-looking male Twi'lek, and here's my attempt.

Anyway, thank you guys for all the positive (and some of the constructively critical) comments!

P.S. You can read the story about this character in my "Stories" folder in my Portfolio, it's called: "STAR WARS: The Purge

Here's another picture. I've tried to work a bit on detail. Sorry that it's still on lined paper, I plan to remedy that soon... (at least by Christmas).

And here's another!!! And look at that: No lined paper!!!


Ryle Vao, Rogue Jedi

Hey, nice job. I like your theme as far as consistency goes.

Today, 1:11 PM: (my time zone)
As you noted, the lined paper is sorta distracting and takes away from the sketch. I also think his left earlobe thingy shouldn't have been cut off. In the same way, I'd like to see the whole body, not up to the middle where it's suddenly cut off.

Today, 8:13 PM:
Finally! White paper! Congrats. I personally don't like the yellow in the background. You might want to fix the wrinkles of his pants a little--I don't think they were that realistic. Otherwise, great job! I think this one is my favorite out of all the pictures you posted.

Sorry for the harsh criticism; I consider myself to be an artist. The only problem is, I highly doubt we have a scanner at home or at school. So yeah. Hope you post more! I'll probably review your previous pics later, it's just that I need to get some sleep now...that wonderful thing....

Fruits_Basket99Tohru wrote:Today, 1:11 PM: (my time zone)
As you noted, the lined paper is sorta distracting and takes away from the sketch. I also think his left earlobe thingy shouldn't have been cut off. In the same way, I'd like to see the whole body, not up to the middle where it's suddenly cut off.

Yeah... kinda ran out of paper there.

Fruits_Basket99Tohru wrote:Today, 8:13 PM:
Finally! White paper! Congrats. I personally don't like the yellow in the background. You might want to fix the wrinkles of his pants a little--I don't think they were that realistic. Otherwise, great job! I think this one is my favorite out of all the pictures you posted.

Thanks!! I'll work on the pants... as you can tell from my previous pictures I didn't get into too much detail with clothing, so I'm trying to fix that...


Oh I wish I had a scanner! I'm stuck with this low-resolution webcam!

Hi there! I liked your drawings! When I was looking at them, I did notice alot of the things that everyone else mentioned, especially the form of his body. I drew a picture in my photo editer, so excuse how sloppy it looks. Anyways, I thought it would help you with the dimensions of the face, such as eye placement, mouth, and nose. For the nose, just follow the vertical line, and draw it in where to two lines intersect. Mouth: make sure the corners line up with the pupils of the face. I've always found the nose hardest to draw, but if it's a cartoon, you don't really have to shade much. Because our faces aren't flat, don't draw the two lines straight; curve them slightly.

Hey, it's me again! I know I already posted once, but I have something else that might help you out. I showed you the basic structure of a face, but I forgot to show you the body. It's something a friend showed me a long time ago, and it really helped me... I'm still terrible at hands and feet though. The first picture is how you would start out:


And the next one, you just go in and draw the lines around the skeleton, to finish it off. After that, just erase your original guidelines!
http://i21.photobucket.com/albums/b299/ ... 5_2440.jpg

(it wouldn't let me upload another attachment, so I had to post it in a link).
I hope this helps you! Just keep practicing at it!

Those are a lot of help, thanks!

OK, here I am to review the first set of pics! You're really into your series, aren't you...?

Ryle Vao, Jedi Knight--This picture is pretty cool. Lightsaber is awesome, but I don't get why you have all those smudged color mark things behind him. I think you're trying to create the idea of motion, but I don't like this approach. Just giving us some swishy/flicky lines (gray lines can do the trick) to the left of his figure works.

Succumbs to DARK side!--It's blurry and unclear, but nice and detailed. Some of the folds in his suit thing don't look realistic to me, but that's just my opinion. Great job anyway! Although I'd like to see the whole message of words...

Shien start position--Wow, this is great! Again, blurry, but that's from the lined paper; would like to see the words; there's a stray line to the left of him and it starts from around his torso.

Felucia Training--I think a closer view and sharper, darker colors would be nice. Again, I'd like to see the words you wrote, even if they're just your signature. Great job overall, though!

Lightsaber--Totally amazazing! This was the best out of all of them, even the second set, by far! Er, well...in my opinion. I would like to see the whole thing, but no other criticism remarks on this one! Wow!

So, you've done an excellent job! I like your inspiration and determination to keep drawing, as well as practically everything 'bout the saber. Anyway, please keep posting your works, and know that I will be waiting for them.

Hey there Lord,

Judging from the pictures you posted later on i can certainly say that you improving a lot and I'm apologizing now for the harsh review I'm about to do. so.. yeah...


Picture 1.

Picture is okay, and i know your trying to give him a certain motion but it honestly looks like he's flying ... is he?

Picture 2.

The best humanoid picture yet in my opinion. Although the feet look like boomerangs and the fold look like cuts. The folds should not go to where you've placed them. I'm personally not an artist but i can safely say that the fold look artificial. Also great details on this one, keep it up!

Picture 3.

The picture is good and so is the position but the picture looks flat and the legs are out of proportion.

Picture 4.

Can't say much about that, its too small and the lines cover the details, but from what i can see t=it seems very good, almost as good as the second picture.

Picture 5.

Loved it! details and all are so cool! Awesome!!

Picture 6.

Much much better, well done, but why'd you shade it? it takes the attention of the viewer away from the main picture.

Picture 7.

Wow, by far the best I'd say. but you should redraw the folds on the trouser and not the shirt. Well done!!!


Keep it up and keep posting, well well done! You can certainly draw better than me!