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ToritheMonster · 2009-11-21T17:00:10Z

I remember a time so many years ago when you jumped on my lap, arched your back and sighed Emerald eyes. I remember a place so many years ago where you'd lie in the sun and watch the clouds go by Emerald eyes. And if I could reverse the years that always take their toll and fill the empty spots and vacant food bowl; if I could go back to the years of your prime, I'd hold you close, emerald eyes. forever in time.

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Sat Jan 09, 2010 2:00 pm

Mizzle says... · Sat Jan 09, 2010 2:00 pm

I didn't like the jagged-ness of the poem, or how it flowed. And how you broke the lines in the beginning--that wasn't my favorite either. But still, good job. A poem's a poem, and you did a good job, especially with the imagery.
Tata, and good job!
-Mizzle

"Chase your dreams, and remember me, speak bravery,
Because after all, those wings will take you up so high."
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Sun Jan 10, 2010 2:23 am

mollytate says... · Sun Jan 10, 2010 2:23 am

At first I thought this was a love poem and I thought the food bowl thing was just metaphorically speaking. Ha ha. Okay so now I know your talking about an animal you lost, which makes perfect sense:)

Either way, I found it to be very poignant. Your a phenonmenal poet. Especially to be 13. I'm jealous. Ha ha just kidding. For real, though, I wouldn't change a thing.

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I'm also not sure why but even though I normally wear cool tones I have a feeling red would have been my color in the 1860s.
— Elinor

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