The prayer for the 21st century (my version)

Hi guys....
I made a poem which is similar to the prayer of the 21st century by john marsden but my version
Hope you enjoy it.

May I have a inspirational, enjoyable and joyful life,
like ever kids have.

May my family have shelter, food, a wonderful life, and good health,
to see the difference of the future that it has in the past.

May the creatures of the wild find shelter, food and a family,
so everyone can see them until they get extinct.

May nature rise with their great and wonderful trees and let the flowers bloom,
so the earth will be a wonderful, green and a cleen place.

May the countries all around the earth be safe, have enough food for the hunger and a clean environment,
for the people to live longer and ave a happier life

May the earth share mother nature's gifts to everyone,
to fulfill and express the most bueatiful gifts of all, Nature.

THE END


Feel free to comment and review my poetry

(for more information about the prayer of the 21st century by John Marsden, click this link http://www.amazon.com/Prayer-Twenty-Fir ... 1887734422 )

This is really great. You covered alot of important things in this and I like that it isn't dominated by fear or worship like all cristian prayers. It focuses on some really great things and shows alot of appreciation, it also flows easily when you read it. Apart from a few typo's this is great.

OK. All in all, a good poem, but there's just one little thing!

Make sure you capitalise the start of each line, unless the non-capitalisation is intentional, in which case it's fine, and don't worry.

I haven't read the original poem, but this sounded pretty pro to me, great job!!

Keep writing!

Pgsgirl x

This really wrestles with todays problems. You are not afraid to mention, straight up, the worlds problems. This poem is good, because it lets us know what is wrong with the world. However, I feel that it is saying that there is no hope left and we must pray. If we all work together we can solve the world's problems. Good poem, keep writing

to live longer and ave a happier life

I think yo umeant have. But other than that i love it ive never heard of the origional but i wanna look it up now man this was sick i loved the bit about nature cause its so true.