sorry

Sorry I have to go about this, this way, but I have a few stories on here that I really like and want to work on, but nobody (or, well, very few people) tend to actually read/crit them. I would very much appreciate if you would crit these peices. Thanks.

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/forum/viewtopic.php?t=4773
This is my as yet unnamed short story. Its more of a monolouge right now, as it will be part of a larger peice, but I don't know how to go about it. Read it to see what I mean. Thanks.

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/forum/viewtopic.php?t=4503&highlight=desert+sky
Under the Desert Sky. This is probably my best/favorite peice yet. Its relatively long, but I think its worth it. I want to try to expand on it to turn it into a novel/basis for a novel, etc. (You know what I mean) but in order to do that, I need as many crits as possible.


Thanks in advance for the reviews!



Dan

Your long story is not that long. I can look over it in my spare time if you want. How much of a critique would you like?

By the way, next time try pm-ing a bunch of random critiquers. It really does work, honest.

Snoink,
As much as possible. And I said the short/longish story was long, because the original, before I edited it when I transferrred it to the computer/internet was like, 23 pages long.

Yeah, I'll try to get to it later...I usually only critique authors who ask if they haven't read my stuff, hehe...

If they HAVENT? Thats weird....well, thats what I get for reading your work, I guess.....

Oops, I meant 'have'...