For Me

I lost a glass slipper
And loved a beast
Let an evil witch
Cast a spell on me
Sometimes fairytales
Don't end happily
But this time it will

I'm going to love a prince
Wake up with a kiss on my lips
Force my foot into the piece of glass
For most Fairytales are suppose to last
But for me
It ends when it starts
But for me
It's already done

I sang to somone who couldn't hear
I watched the whole world change
With a glance in the mirror
I talked to a stranger
Who beat me home
You take it from there

I'm going to sing the silence of the music
And smash my fist into the glass
Because starting today
I'm never looking back
For most happiness lies in the past
But for me
It's no where to be found
But for me
The bridge has fallen down

I danced with someone
Once upon a dream
I helped a young girl
Before she could scream
The sad thing is
That girl was me

I'm going to sleep when I'm dead
And live after I die
And the whole world will fall apart
Every time I cry
But for me
I'm done crying for now
But as for me
I'm already gone

I fell in love with this song when Taylor had first shown me it. I made her sing it like five times before I was satisfied. It is quite interesting to watch her sing her songs. You can tell she spends a ton of time on them and sings them from the bottom of her heart. The words, the music, means something to her. No, it means everything to her. It is so weird what's going down with her. Review on this song. It will make her very happy. Trust me. It will especially make Jenny happy.

Hi, Hi...


Bleeding Rose your poem is really touching, but i must say it has no rythem...

The following advice will help you in getting rythem into your poem.


Punctuation is a set of symbols used in writing to help indicate something about the structure of sentences, or to assist readers in knowing when to change the rhythm or the stress of their speaking. Depending on the style of writing and the language used, punctuation may tend towards one of these purposes more than the other. Common units of punctuation in English and many other languages include the comma, period, apostrophe, quotation mark, question mark, exclamation mark, bracket, dash, hyphen, ellipsis, colon, and semicolon. Each of these units indicates a different thing, and some may have multiple meanings depending on context.

1. The period or full stop, question mark, exclamation mark, and ellipsis all serve to terminate a sentence. A period is the default terminal punctuation mark, used to end a sentence without conveying any additional meaning. A question mark indicates that the preceding sentence takes the form of an interrogative, and may also be read to change the tone when reading aloud to reflect this. An exclamation mark indicates that the preceding sentence is somehow excited or extremely important, and if read aloud should be given special stress. An ellipsis indicates that some part of the sentence is being omitted; this may be used to refer to a theoretical clause, in which case it usually implies a trailing off of the voice when read aloud, or it may indicate that a real part of the sentence is omitted, often used when quoting long passages or quotations.

2. The comma is used for a wide range of different purposes in punctuation. In general, it is considered necessary stylistically to have all commas in a sentence serve the same function, to avoid confusion on the part of the reader. A comma may be used to separate units of a sentence such as an introduction or parenthetical thought, to separate items in lists such as this one, to lead a sentence into a quotation, and to separate independent clauses joined by a word such as “and” or “yet”. Commas also have a number of less common uses, too numerous to list in detail.

3. An apostrophe may be used as punctuation within a word to indicate an omitted letter, as in contractions such as don’t or e’er. It may also be used to show that a noun is possessive, such as in Harry’s name or the Seven Seas’ unrelenting waves.

4. Quotation marks are used as punctuation to denote quotations within text, or to offset a word or phrase as being an ironic or non-standard usage. The most common type of quotation marks are double quotes, such as: “There is much to like about that,” she said. Or: I wouldn’t say I “missed” work the other day. Single quotation marks, which are a type of punctuation that look similar to an apostrophe, may be used for quotations within quotations, such as in the case of: “As the Bard said, ‘To be or not to be, that is the question,’” He said sagely.

5. Dashes are used for a number of different purposes, often to link specific things together. A figure dash is used to link numbers together, such as in a phone number. An en dash is used to link things that are within a range, such as page numbers. An em dash is traditionally used to separate a thought from the flow of the sentence – like this – in an almost parenthetical manner. In some modern style guides, the en dash is taking over the em dash’s role of a thought separator in formal writing. A quotation dash is a unit of punctuation which looks approximately the same as the em dash, used to cite a quotation’s source in-text.

6. Hyphens are punctuation marks which look similar to dashes, but are shorter, and are used to join compound words which haven’t yet become independent words or which are being used adjectivally.

7. Brackets are used to offset text in some way from the main body. The main type of bracket punctuation used in writing is the parenthesis, with the others being used either to indicate parenthetical thoughts within a set of parenthesis or for specialized usages depending on style.

8. The colon is a unit of punctuation typically used to introduce a subsequent sentence that is in some way logically linked to the preceding sentence. Therefore, one may find colons serving as punctuation to introduce a list, to offset something that is a consequence of the fact stated in the preceding sentence, or to lead into a quotation.

9. A semicolon is a unit of punctuation used to link two independent clauses. It is usually used where a period is thought to create too strong a break between the sentences, but a comma is too weak a break. Often, semicolons are also used in place of a comma in lists which use commas for purposes other than offsetting list items, to avoid confusion.


continue writting, and keep up the good work.

My God, i luv this song so much. Great Job!
Um...maybe this is 2 much 2 ask but cud u like allow me n ,y band 2 sing it 4 a talent show thts takin place in my skool? Pwease?
AWESUME song man
xx

This was very good.


The only thing I have a comment on is this:

Don't end happily

I think it would sound better as 'Don't happily end.'

Other than that, I loved this. Sorry I don't have much more to add, but, there really was few mistakes or things that were bad.


Thanks for the good read.


---Jon---

Bleeding Rose wrote:I'm going to love a prince
Wake up with a kiss on my lips
Force my foot into the piece of glass
For most Fairytales are suppose to last
But for me
It ends when it starts
But for me
It's already done

I really liked this stanza. Especially the 'force my foot into a piece of glass', I just really like how you wrote that. And I liked the ending of it too.

Bleeding Rose wrote:I sang to somone ((someone)) who couldn't hear
I watched the whole world change
With a glance in the mirror
I talked to a stranger
Who beat me home
You take it from there

Loved the rhyming here!


Alright, I loved this song! I loved the theme, the subtle rhyming, everything. It was awesome!
Gold star for you!

-Carly

I think this is the third or so poem/lyric I read on here, since I am new. And I've got to say I really love your writing here, its so pretty and powerful at the same time.

I really liked this song. This song shows the darkness of the fairy tales, and it is a pretty sad, painful love song. Matter of fact I imagined it more like Gothic rock or screamo. The only problem is that you forgout about the punctuation thats why it is hard to see what type of song this is, but I don't blame you because I use to forget about it constintly. Anyways you deserve a star!

I wrote that? Thank you for the positive and negative comments everyone. I will ask Jenny about it. Maybe I can change it and repost it?

I LOVE the theme of this, thats generally all i look at because spelling and stuff is what autocorrect is for

But i think this is great, and the fairytale analogy is really classic.

Ella Xx