This Is My Fairytale

I liked this. I can relate to a lot of the poem, especially the main idea of it. My favorite line of it had to be "It's my fairytale and my tragedy".

Now, on for the nitpicks:

and it will have my bees.

I don't understand this line. I'm thinking the bees have something to do with anger because of the whole bees buzzing around when they're angry thing but I'm probably completly off.

and how I might redeem

Although I like this line, there's something slightly off about it. I want to say "Redeem what?" but that wouldn't be right.

As for the punctation, maybe just put a period at the end of each stanza?

I apologize for the extremely crappy review. Reviewing poetry isn't my strong suite.

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-Always

Hiya! While this is repetitive, I love it. I think the rhyme scheme is very nice, and although it does leave a question, you meant to do that so the readers could interpret it the way they want to. Very nice concept. Good job, overall! Gold star for you.

This is my story

I'll write it as I please

With my joys and happiness

and my broken dreams

The 'happiness' kind of ruins the whole rythm that was sort of started. But then again, I know nothing about poetry ...

OVERALL IMPRESSIONS

I liked it. The last paragraph was a nice powerful ending! Good job Forever. Gold star!

Again, good job. You're such a good poet. I love all of your work. I don't mind the repetition at all.
I loved the concept and the art at which you told the story. It definately does leave something for someone to fill in. It flowed freely and beautifully.

Good Job.

I don't adore this poem, but I was charmed by how passionately you defended it. I am not a fan of online critique for poetry, because I believe that it is too personal to be beaten, stretched and slashed to fit everyone's preferences.
Good for you, standing up for your work. I am truly a fan.