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*runs up to Evi*

Evi, darling! I just wrote my first free verse and my longest poem ever. Help.

I didn't pay attention to the rhythm schemes or anything. I want to turn the story-ish poem into a poem-ish story, if you get what I'm saying! No, wait. Flip that. Haha.

So I need you, Evi, to put on your superhero reviewer cape, swoosh in, and edit the heck out of my piece! Haha.

Here's the link: topic45037.html

Thanks!

Love,
Music.

(And if you want anything reviewed, swing by my thread! I'd be happy to help!)
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"You treat me badly; I love you madly."
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I give you love, candy, and this story:

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How am I not myself?




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Lost and Music are done, as well as one of Climber's three requests. Not sure if the other two need reviewing dear, but I'll check them out.

And Clo, one review coming right up!

EDIT: Clo is finished. Anyone else?
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Do you think I could be really, really evil and ask for another?

It's a tiny poem, only four lines long, and in return I will most definitely review something of yours, no two things. xD

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for what are we without words and stories?




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Done and done, Jon and Lost. I have way too much free time on my hands. ^_^
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Hi Evi! Here's a link to part II of my story. It's historical fiction. I think it would help if you read part I first, if you haven't already. Please nit-pick as much as you feel necessary, especially when it comes to grammar and awkward sentences. Although I don't think there will be too many grammatical mistakes. Also, I would love to know your interest level. Please let me know if you're really bored. Thank you so much!

Here's the link:
topic44921.html

Let me know if I can review anything for you in return!
Thanks again,
Winter
Mamillius: Merry or sad shall’t be?
Hermione: As merry as you will.
Mamillius: A sad tale’s best for winter. I have one
Of sprites and goblins.

The Winter's Tale




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Done! 8) Am I efficient or what?
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*bump*

C'mon, people. You have to keep the Emporium in business during these trying economical difficulties. It is my duty to serve.

;)
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Hi Evi. Can I bug you for a review? I'll give you a cookie.

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"You can love someone so much...But you can never love people as much as you can miss them."




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Nice job, Pen. You're finished. ;)

Step on up, people, get your reviews here!
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Hi,
I need a review for my story, Like a Button:

topic45633.html

Please be as harsh as you want, as this needs much work. The second part more so then the first.

Love,
N
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Eviness!

I have edited that little romance I gave you.

topic45718.html

Shred it!
A writer is a world trapped in a person— Victor Hugo

Ink is blood. Paper is bandages. The wounded press books to their heart to know they're not alone.




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Done, Lakegirls and Rosey. ^_^ It's been a crazy Spring Break for me--that's why it took me so long--but I'll be able to get to critiques faster now that it's back to school. *sigh*

;)
"Let's eat, Grandma!" as opposed to "Let's eat Grandma!": punctuation saves lives.




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Could you please rip to death my story, Listless? c:
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