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...I like the way these lines represent something both literal and figurative. A hand is capable of holding, but a truth is metaphysical, and therefore impossible to hold. I like the use of the word hold to imply that your hand is holding something that it's not really holding. Hard to understand from my rather strang utterings, but hopefully you get what I mean.
...I'm not particularly good at correcting grammar, but I don't think you should use an ellipsis here. Why here but not in the lines above which are basically the same? Feel free to correct me though, I love to know where I went wrong and learn to improve upon it, so I'm not saying I'm definitely correct.
...This point is tying in with the above points, yes? If so, right, this is going to be slightly hard for me to explain, but I'll try.
...Hold should have an s on the end. It should read: My hand holds the nostalgia of the past. Besides that I rather like this poem so far, it is rising in my expectations.
...At first I was rather unsure as to what you meant by this. Perhaps it is because I do not think the same way as normal people. I think in a sort of different way, if that makes sense, but initially I thought this was talking of the hand as opposed to the nostalgia of the past, which you evidently wanted it to.
...The latter word in this line appeared to me a little strange. Innovation is almost physical, not quite, but almost. Obviously our brains contribute to innovation too, but our hands make things. So this isn't quite as figurative as the rest of the words in the poem. Perhaps you'd like to change that, or perhaps you'd rather keep it. I don't think it shall make too much of an impact upon your poem
...This one also seemed slightly strange to me. I might be completely barking up the wrong tree, but to me fear actually is physical. As much as we don't hold fear in our hands, fear holds our hands. Fear makes us shake or shiver, impacting upon our hands. If you get what I'm saying. xD
...I think, there is something rather strange about this couplet. Are not the unstableness of what lays near and the mysteries of the future the same thing? No, I actually like it this way, it seems to indicate a change in tone, from negative to positive, yes? I do like it.
...What happened to the rhyming system you had going?
...I'd rather you changed the last line, as I find it rather cliched and over used compared with the rest of this poem.
So, for the purpose of this critique we're going to assume that holding is physical, okay. 
More like a creepy hand possessing thing.
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