Moonshot: A Poet's Letter to God

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There is this highschool class called Creative Expressions. If I think about it, you can read this, just the way they do.
It has such this wonderful flow and your 20 year old Texan voice sure as anything would go good with you readin' it.

I just got one question:
Why did god outgrow all my skirts and dresses?




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Fabulous.... grabulous... zip-zoop-ZABULOUS! Seriously, that was a great read. Well done.
Gone, gone from New York City,
where you gonna go with a head that empty?
Gone, gone from New York City,
where you gonna go with a heart that gone?




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I'll have to say, there's not much to say. The last stanza was the best. And um...wow. I didn't hesitate reading this poem twice. I should be giving productive critiquing but if you'd stop writing poems holding so much meaning and substance, I might be able to pull something out if it. But right now it's so deep, I can barely see what's going on down there.
when there's nowhere to go, it's time to grow up.




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I really liked this. It has a very unique feel to it and is just great. Nice
~ WD
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"All I know, all I'm saying, is that a story finds a storyteller. Not the other way around." ~Neverwas




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You make us all look bad, you know. You really do.
Got a poem or short story you want me to critique?

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