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Humans become monsters
Today I watch one of them
He does not know
He does not fear
But the process
Begins now

OBVIOUS OBSERVATION -TODAY IS DAY ONE

He wakes up
Brushes his teeth
Goes to work

ANOTHER OBVIOUS OBSERVATION- HE IS NORMAL

Tomorrow he will wake up
Brush his teeth
Go to work

PATIENCE- GREAT VIRTUE

But the day after tomorrow
Man is late for work
Teeth not brushed in a morning rush

RHYMING- UNINTENDED
I DON’T HAVE TIME FOR WORD GAMES

He is late again tomorrow
Then again
Man is angry
Alarm clock is broken

ALARM CLOCK- BROKEN
QUITE PURPOUSEFULLY

Goes into store
Man buys another

ALARM CLOCK- BROKEN
QUITE PURPOUSEFULLY

Angry now
So I watch
He will not buy another
He will be late

Man is scolded again
He does not care

MAN = SILLY

He
Gets
Fired
He
Gets
Angry

MONSTER-NESS - RISING

To support his family
He tries to find
Someplace else
That wants him

NO ONE WANTS MAN
QUITE PURPOUSEFULLY

But how does the bacon get home
First a wallet
But not his of course

YOU ARE STARTING TO LEARN

The money reeks of guilt
But its feels nice

Next stop is a store
But not his
He holds the gun
It feels like cold chocolate
He gets food
His family eats

OBJECT OF IMPORTANCE- GUN

Many more second stops
Man realizes
This is how it is supposed to be

MONSTER-NESS - RISING

Gun feels like chocolate
It is sticky

ACTUAL GUN STICKYNESS- LOW

His family eats
But then there are no more stores to steal from
And he is being watched
He knows it
The people watching him know it
They will find him

THEY ACTUALLY HAVE NO CLUE
QUITE PURPOUSEFULLY

He runs
Run Monster run
He is being watched
He does not go outside
His family does not eat

MONSTER WILL BE REAL MONSTER SOON

His family leaves
They are not being watched
They are not Monster
They forget him
In time
As with all things

HUMANS = SILLY

They were Monster’s purpose in life

MAN MINUS EVERYTHING = MONSTER

Monster starves alone
He kills another for food
The one he killed had no food

MONSTER- THOUGHT IT TASTED NICE

For a purpose he reads the bible
He is a sinner
He finds ways to hurt himself

MONSTER PHILOSOPHY
PAIN INSIDE > PAIN OUTSIDE

MONSTER = NOT THAT BRIGHT

Monster kills another man
He descends the stairwell to savagery
All because of an alarm clock
Brilliant, huh?

SORRY
OUT OF CONTEXT
I WILL CONTINUE

Man finds Monster
Man laughs
He beats himself
He is no longer a human
Laugh

LAUGH
HERE IS A STORY OF MONSTERS LIFE

He was a good man
Alarm clock
Got fired
Man wasn’t wanted
QUITE PURPOUSEFULLY
What to do
Rob a store
The gun felt sticky
So he didn’t let go
Then he realized he was a dead man
HE WAS NOT
PURPOUSEFULLY
Then he became a monster

Now he reads the bible
Hurts himself
Prays for death
He is nothing now

THEN I COME
END HIS LIFE
HIS SOUL TASTES LIKE RED
MONSTER IS NOW NO MORE
I DO THIS FOR A REASON
BECAUSE AS MENTIONED BEFOREHAND
HUMAN = SILLY
MAYBE YOU’LL LEARN
AND I’LL BE OUT OF A JOB
BUT NO
I KNOW
ALL HUMANS ARE SIMPILY MONSTERS
FROM PRIMAL TIMES
DESCEND DOWN TO THE HELL YOU CAME FROM
YOU ARE BETTER THERE
I SHOULD WRITE A STORY
AND GIVE IT TO YOU HUMANS
AND START IT WITH

Humans become monsters

SO MAYBE YOU’LL ALL JUST DIE
SO I CAN SIT AROUND ALL DAY
HUMANS BECOME MONSTERS
HUMANS BECOME NOTHING
HUMANS GO BACK TO THE HELL FROM WHICH YOU CAME

IT ALL COMES IN TIME

LAUGH
Last edited by Jonny on Wed Nov 05, 2008 6:53 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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ooooo, I really like this!

I've never seen anything written like this before and I thought it was really well done. Kind of weird, but really well done.
I liked the short, blunt, to the point sentences.
The end part kind of confused me though, when it starts with "THEN I COME".

I really liked it though, gold star for you! :D

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^^

You were right!

I did enjoy this thoroughly. ^^

It was interesting.

I'd like it, not much to critique, it's all mostly spelled right, so all in all.

THIS=GOOD

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