Tainted Blood Ch.1 Part 1

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I find this very amusing!

"I reflect on the nightmare that had come to haunt me these past few months. It always starts in a dark alley next to a busy street. I feel what seems an unquenchable thirst. To my surprise I crouch in the darkest corner, which is unusual because I hate the dark. I am not alone for long before someone arrives, a different person, a different face."

I like how you wrote that, you tend to give part of the image at first then come back with the whole image which makes the reader interested.(I'm not sure if you get what i mean but hopefully you do) ^^




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Thanks, I edited it again!
As your pretty, so be wise,
Wolves may lurk in every guise.



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