Wow, Brad this is really good. Seriousy I really liked this.
I could find pretty much no mistakes except for a few typos I thought you would appreciate if I pointed them out:
In page 8 of 11, second paragraph;
You have "SKY5400I" and "SKY5400i"... are they the same?
In page 9 of 11, in the second paragraph;
First sentence: the 'k' is missing between 'Mar' and 'etplace'
Same sentence: "Kingdo of Gab iel" to "Kingdom of Gabriel" (i think your using Gabriel)
Page 10 out of 11, first paragraph;
First sentence: "Mar etplace" to "Marketplace"
Other than those small things, again, this was really good.
Oh I have a question, did you really copyright this?
If so, where did you go and how much did it cost?
"The mark of your ignorance is the depth of your belief in injustice and tragedy. What the caterpillar calls the end of the world, the Master calls the butterfly." ~ Richard Bach
Hahaha. No, it's okay. I already noticed them, but the thing about Marketplace -> Mar etplace is sarcasm about the faded out cloth (i.e. some letters don't show up.).
"If I have not seen as far as others, it is because giants were standing on my shoulders." -Hal Abelson
