Yoyo's Crit Requests

Please critique my Butterfly Photography:

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic30054.html

Hey, yoyo,

Here's the next part of The Human Side of Things. Hope you like it.

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Hey, Yoyo! You really liked 'I Think I'm in Love' so I think you might also like Run, Fat Boy, Run!. This is just day one. It's been a blast to write. And I need some help with it!

Well, thanks for being friggen awesome all the time!

-Jared

Thanks for all the requests! I will get to these soon. And I apologize for the delay but I've got an awfully and unusually busy weekend with my graduation and everything, but I will try to get all these done by next week Friday. And it's first-come, first-serve. Thanks for your patience!

~Yoyo

'Ello, Yoyo!!! ^^ I know that you're busy, but I came across this and temptation was too much to resist!!!

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Critique it if and when you have time! Feel free to move on to the next chapter, too, if and when you have time for that.

Hi. I'd love it if you critiqued this story. It's in Advanced Critiques, and is 16 pages, but if you do it I'll give you 50 pts.
www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic30959.html#30959

This chapter is lonely...

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This is the third chapter, as there are three pieces that precede it - as I told Ari, I don't expect you to critique those, but you can skim them if you'd like, none of them are long. If you don't want to do that, you could just critique the prologue, even though it's a bit old.

Okay, wow. I'm back, I think. I tried to get to some of these, but my summer has been SO much busier than I expected, I had to skip a few. If I skipped yours and you still want a critique on it, just post again, and I'll do my best to get to it.

Remember, you are much more likely to get a poem critiqued than a story because I can do that in one sitting. But I will do my best to get to everyone! Thanks for stopping by!

~Yoyo

If you need a crit, My Dawn With Fox (on my featured works) could use work. :]

--Medusa.

Hey love,

Life: In which mistakes are made : topic32468.html

I'ts rated R. But if you could, I'd love you forever. No rush.

*Hearts* Le Penguin.

Done and done!

~Yoyo

I find myself in a need for more points to post a sudden flood of poetry. Please send your critique requests this way!! I will gladly do them soon!

~Yoyo

ATV Magic

It's a photo... I don't care what you do with it. I think it looks really cool.

-Jared

hey I just got a poem out and would love for you to check it out here it is:
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it is called Above It and, i know that it is not the best poem in the world, but i was just wondering what i could fix. thank you

I love you like chocolate?

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If you don't mind? It's called Singed Fingers and Disappointments. It's for a contest and due soon, so be harsh. ^^

*Hearts* Le Penguin.