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its pretty interesting. But it really makes no sense to me, I suppose. But then again my opinion doesn't really matter to you. So anywho the words were pretty neat making cool sentences. Didn't match together for me atleast. But still I liked this. ^_^
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Spelling in some places need work, that or wording...I liked how you described things and such...Overall: Awesome! Still needs work though...

Heh, I like silver and spiders...

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The idea was good, but maybe add a little more to it? It was a little hard to follow with all the line changes and everything, but overall, I look forward to the perfected version! Other than that, anything else I'd say has already been said.

Cheers!

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