100 Reviews in *collective gasp* 111 Days??? • Young Writers Society

Areida · 2008-03-12T04:08:29Z

Hi YWS! As many of you already know, I've been accepted to the United States Military Academy at West Point and will leave to begin basic training ("Beast Barracks") June 30th. That doesn't leave me a lot of time to do the normal kid thing, and once I go, there will be a six to seven week period of zero Internet availability, then a much smaller window of time for me to come play here. This summer will be the longest time I've gone without YWS since I joined here three years ago, as a wee freshman. ERGO, I want to go on a major critiquing spree before I go. I was hoping to do a nifty thing where I complete 100 reviews in my remaining 100 days. Then I counted and realized that I actually had 111 days to go, but 111 reviews doesn't really have as nice a ring to it, plus I'm all over the place this month with traveling (Chicago and Italy ftw!) and academic competitions (empress of Current Events, Persuasive Speaking, Duet Acting, and Original Oratory, pa-shaw!). And I missed the critiquing weekend. *holds out wrist* Yes, you may all slap my wrist. And you may also leave your critique requests here. I do better with fiction than with poetry, although I will critique both. And I love dialogue, so if you have chunks and chunks of descriptive prose (a la Tolkien) then please make sure it's good chunks and chunks of descriptive prose, or I will be sad and stare at the screen in despair, wondering what I ever did that was so wrong that I had to critique one piece after another, filled with descriptive prose. *dramatic sigh* Aaaaaaaaaaaaaand... I think that's all. Leave me a link to your pieces here; I'll keep a running list in this message to mark my progress. Thanks guys! Pieces Critiqued Updated 06/10/08 100. Broken Bones , by Firestarter [03/31/08] 99. Cal's Contest: TIOBS , by TL G-Wooster [03/31/08] 98. Teeth, a horror story , by valiant [04/07/08] 97. Jack's NaPoWriMo Thread , by Firestarter [04/07/08] 96. Foreign Markets: 1x01 "Pilot / Alpha Dogs" , by Incandescence [04/11/08] 95. Foreign Markets: 1x02 "The Package" , by Incandescence [04/11/08] 94. Anniversary , by GingerLizzy [04/11/08] 93. Truth's Dawning , by Smiley [04/11/08] 92. For Matty , by JFW1415 [04/13/08] 91. Fantasizing , by JFW1415 [04/13/08] 90. Bits and Pieces: Agatha , by Suzanne [04/13/08] 89. Pandora's Box , by Snoink [04/20/08] 88. oreo , by omggdariannnn [04/20/08] 87. The things I do for Love , by babyboymilky [04/20/08] 86. Pictures of Victoria , by Mortality [04/21/08] 85. I could talk to you forever , by Alice [04/24/08] 84. Foreign Markets: 1x03 "Clubfoot" , by Incandescence [04/24/08] 83. Foreign Markets: 1x04 "Swollen Grapes" , by Incandescence [04/24/08] 82. Foreign Markets: 1x05 "Between a Rock and a Hard Place" , by Incandescence [04/24/08] 81. And We All Go The Same Way Home , by Saint Razorblade [04/24/08] 80. Self Portrait , by OverEasy [04/24/08] 79. City Underground , by yoha_ahoy [04/27/08] 78. Misty Morning Flowers , by Sacred [04/27/08] 77. Benedict's Goodbye , by Jennafina [06/02/08] 76. The Romantic Writer , by ~Volant~ [06/02/08] 75. Sister of Mine , by chocoholic [06/05/08] 74. The Sundress , by elephantwalrus [06/09/08] 73. God Still Loves You (1) , by Suzanne [06/09/08] 72. Missa Nautica (for Cal's Contest) , by Sam [06/09/08] 71. God Still Loves You (2) , by Suzanne [06/09/08] 70. Gerrymandering (1) , by Sam [06/09/08] 69. Sunset , by lit-chick-4evaa [06/09/08] 68. Gerrymandering (2) , by Sam [06/09/08] 67. God Still Loves You (3) , by Suzanne [06/09/08] 66. Two Shakes of A Lamb's Tail , by Trident [06/09/08] 65. God Still Loves You (4) , by Suzanne [06/09/08] 64. Long Line, Sweetheart , by Trident [06/09/08] 63. StoweAway #1 , by BigBadBear [06/10/08] 62. Bruises (Drunken Alcoholic) , by Sportgurl46 [06/10/08] 61. Cooties , by Monki [06/10/08] 60. One Fall , by chocoholic [06/11/08] 59. 58. 57. 56. 55. 54. 53. 52. 51. 50. 49. 48. 47. 46. 45, 43, 42, 41, 40.

JFW1415

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Wed Mar 12, 2008 11:47 pm

JFW1415 says... · Wed Mar 12, 2008 11:47 pm

*Jaw drops on floor*

Seriously? Well, I have several...

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic26999.html

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic27043.html

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic27001.html

http://www.youngwriterssociety.com/topic21992.html

Wow, that's a lot. :shock:

Well, if you critique anything of mine I will be INSANELY grateful. *Offers cookies as bribes*

Good luck with the military camp thing!

~JFW1415

chocoholic

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Wed Mar 12, 2008 11:58 pm

chocoholic says... · Wed Mar 12, 2008 11:58 pm

Here's a couple of short stories for you to crit!

Sister of Mine: topic17474.html
One Fall: topic16783.html

*Don't expect to see me around much in the next couple of weeks. School has started again, and it'll be a couple of weeks before I've settled in. If you've asked me for a critique, you will get it, but not for a little while. Sorry*

Kylan

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Thu Mar 13, 2008 12:05 am

Kylan says... · Thu Mar 13, 2008 12:05 am

A poem, perchance?

Suspensional Combustion

Pleas and thank you!

-Kylan

"I am beginning to despair
and can see only two choices:
either go crazy or turn holy."

- Serenade, Adélia Prado

Areida

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Thu Mar 13, 2008 5:56 am

Areida says... · Thu Mar 13, 2008 5:56 am

Hehe, thanks for giving me direction, guys. No promises on how quickly I'll get to them, but I hope to get a niiiiice good look at them all.

And not camp! Don't say camp. It's a beautiful, pretigious, amazing military academy, sillies.

Jack - Yes! Please write me something! Or I'll critique all your poems from 2005. XD

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Jennafina

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Fri Mar 14, 2008 10:18 pm

Jennafina says... · Fri Mar 14, 2008 10:18 pm

topic27150.html

Haha, I did write something.

If you have time, it needs severe harshness, haha.

Jennafina's Love Your Body Already Dammit Campaign

forum353.html

(To find out what it really is, just click.)

Areida

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Tue Jun 03, 2008 12:07 am

Areida says... · Tue Jun 03, 2008 12:07 am

I know I am behind, my pretties, but if you want a review, this is my last call for requests. I only have a few weeks to make the large majority of my goal. Whee procrastination.

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Icaruss

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Tue Jun 03, 2008 1:18 am

Icaruss says... · Tue Jun 03, 2008 1:18 am

Break-Up.
Anniversary.

If you'd be so kind.

there are many problems in our times
but none of them are mine

Lynlyn

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Tue Jun 03, 2008 5:10 pm

Lynlyn says... · Tue Jun 03, 2008 5:10 pm

This chapter is lonely...

topic30973.html

This is the third chapter, as there are two chapters and a prologue before - I don't expect you to critique those, but you can skim them if you'd like, none of them are long. If you're uncomfortable doing that, you could just critique the prologue, even though it's a bit old.

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myfreindsavamp

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Thu Jun 05, 2008 2:23 am

myfreindsavamp says... · Thu Jun 05, 2008 2:23 am

May I help?

R.ed R.ideing H.ood: wolfish boy

topic31000.html

We've all been broken in some way. It's just how we express it that makes us dffrent form eachother.

“This precious book of love, this unbound lover,
To beautify him only lacks a cover.”
~William Shakespeare, The Tragedy of Romeo and Juliet

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Thu Jun 05, 2008 9:26 pm

JabberHut says... · Thu Jun 05, 2008 9:26 pm

Oh dear, you definitely have a lot in front of me. Here's something that could use a few pairs of eyes. If you don't get to it, that's fine, but here it is!

The Dragon, the Dog, and the Dove

The Academy sounds exciting, by the way! ^^

~ Jabber ~

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Wed Mar 29, 2023 8:07 pm

DreamyAlice says... · Wed Mar 29, 2023 8:07 pm

Hello, I am one of the res crew mods here on YWS. This is a message just to inform you that I will lock and archive this thread as it is not active anymore. We have to archive and lock the inactive threads to keep the forum organized so no worries, if you'd like to reopen it at any point in the future please contact a current resources moderator, we would be happy to reopen it for you ^-^

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