Nothing

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:D One sees what is there but sees nothing,
For nothing is always around.
Nothing is in a doughnut hole
( I'm afraid it will never be found)
When some people talk you'll hear nothing,
for they really have nothing to say,
There are people who seem very busy,
Who really do nothing all day.
But nothing can sometims be something
Or so i've often heard,
For this poem is actually nothing-
And you have read every word. :lol:




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wonderful actually, now everytime I look in the mirror, I will have so many questions.. (do I really see myself or am I nothing...??) You are a great poet, I like this... I do wonder why there are no other critiques... or maybe they would rather SAY NOTHING. In any event, you are wonderful... so much irony... my head is spinning... good job!
"Am I that obvious? And if it's written on my face... I hope it never goes away." Pieces of me, Ashlee Simpson :)




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i really liked that. it was good.
Some people call me the space cowboy




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Clever, quick and humorous. I quite liked it. I would advise that you clean up the punctuation though, get rid of the capitals at the beginning of each new line, and remove the emoticons, as they make it hard to take the poem seriously as it were.

Entertaining and well-constructed.

Cheers,
~bubbles
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There is only one success: to be able to spend your life in your own way, and not to give others absurd maddening claims upon it. (C D Morley)




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Ha, ha! I love it! Simple, witty, funny and brilliant! Exxccceeleennt job! :wink:
Of course it's happening in your mind, but why on earth should that mean it isn't real?



I tell the neophyte: Write a million words–the absolute best you can write, then throw it all away and bravely turn your back on what you have written. At that point, you’re ready to begin.
— David Eddings