I'm gonna have to interject here and say, this sucks. It really makes no sense, no story, kinda just making rhymes that don't really rhyme, Eh? It really doesn't seem to me like you get the concept of this all. Read some books before trying "rap". I really doubt you grew up in some kind of cop infested hole where illegal activities flourished all the time. So please, don't pretend.
This is really good! I agree with people that I'm glad this song doesn't potray what most rap songs do nowadays (girls and there asses ).
I think it flowed really well, and had a cool meaning, and to the person above I have to disagree, this rap makes ALOT of sense. Sweet rhyming, and I hope someday to hear it on the radio! Lots of people here agree.
To Henry, people can write about what they want to write, just because they didn't grow up in that kind of enviorment doesn't mean they can't write about it, I completely disagree.
Plus, you are also being judgmental. Don't assume things and say he is pretending, you don't know him in real life do you? I think the rap is great, and what you said is actually very degrading and not helpful to him at all.
Anyway, no trying to pick a fight, just saying what I believe in my point of view. If you ever do write rap again, please tell me, this was really cool!
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yea i agree with other ppl, its raw and truthful, i prefer the raps tat r out there tat are more meaningful like this one, and like common's girl with so much soul ect,
maybe you should record this, and send a link on this page.
*feels like crying* haha I came so late on reading this.....a couple years too late rick I've always loved what you've written and hope that we can talk again someday haha ^-^
but for now go on doing what you do my old grey friend.
As many others are saying, I am not the biggest of rap fans. However, this does sound fun and it would be cool to be able to actually hear this one performed!
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