Ode to Dono

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Meshugenah
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Mon Dec 31, 2007 11:32 pm
Meshugenah says... · Mon Dec 31, 2007 11:32 pm
There once was a young boy named Dono
Who thought he could sing just like Bono.
He comes off as a bear
Though he does have good hair
But his voice is consistently mono.


Credit: written by my mother and me for Dono.
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Mon Dec 31, 2007 11:34 pm
BigBadBear says... · Mon Dec 31, 2007 11:34 pm
XD

That was funny. The flow is brilliant. You have painted exceptional paintings into my head with the wonderful description. The word choice was utterly amazing!

And the rhyming...oh gosh! Literally fantastic. It flowed in a way that a river would down a creek.

XD

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Mon Dec 31, 2007 11:35 pm
Aet Lindling says... · Mon Dec 31, 2007 11:35 pm
Lol, I wuv it.

...this may be my first short, "nothing to crit" critique, but it deserves it. This be perfect!
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Mon Dec 31, 2007 11:37 pm
Phoebe says... · Mon Dec 31, 2007 11:37 pm
I truly commend your word choice hear, Lady Beks, though I thought the comparison to a bear might have connotations best left untouched--or, rather, more thoroughly propounded. Encore, encore!
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Mon Dec 31, 2007 11:37 pm
Ego says... · Mon Dec 31, 2007 11:37 pm
Yeah, yeah...perfect hair indeed.

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Tue Jan 01, 2008 12:10 am
Wolf says... · Tue Jan 01, 2008 12:10 am
Lol, that was awesome. I love your word choices and wait - Dono? As in Hunter? :lol:

Anyways, this is really short (short but sweet) so I really have nothing to crit. But this rocked! :)

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Tue Jan 01, 2008 1:45 am
Teague says... · Tue Jan 01, 2008 1:45 am
*gigglesnort*

What does Dono sound like when he sings, anyway?

Lol, this is brilliant, Mesh and Mesh's Mum! ^_^

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Tue Jan 01, 2008 1:58 am
Snoink says... · Tue Jan 01, 2008 1:58 am
Haha... he sounds sexy, of course.

And yay! I don't think it's possible to fix the last line, but whatever. We get the idea, so it works. :P
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Tue Jan 01, 2008 5:55 pm
Lucky_Duck says... · Tue Jan 01, 2008 5:55 pm
That was funny... It seems to me that we don't get very many limericks around here. Good job Mesh and Mesh's mom!!

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Tue Jan 01, 2008 6:23 pm
Firestarter says... · Tue Jan 01, 2008 6:23 pm
Worthy of all praise. A fantastic tour de force of literature. Except for the second line, which is awful.
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Tue Jan 01, 2008 6:29 pm
Areida says... · Tue Jan 01, 2008 6:29 pm
Ah, Dono, how do we love thee? Let us count the ways...

'Tis lovely, Mesh dear! *applauds*
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Wed Jan 02, 2008 1:38 am
Riedawriter23 says... · Wed Jan 02, 2008 1:38 am
I loved it! XDXD *still laughing* Brilliant Mesh! Yay for Donoism! ...I wanna hear Dono sing. :(
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Wed Jan 09, 2008 8:43 pm
Paroxysm Effect says... · Wed Jan 09, 2008 8:43 pm
hmm...I must commend you on this extraordinary work of poetry ;-)

But seriously, it is quite good. I can't write limericks at all, so I'm jealous.

I have unfortunately never heard Dono sing, so I don't know how true this all is, but whatever :D

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