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Well, I did like this poem.... but I do think you could have added a little more.... Maybe you could tell us what you like about him... Maybe this could exstend into a short story... Maybe? No, just a thought.
We're meant to be one
I know we are...
If I am the Sky
Then you are my star... ™




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This feels very "teenage melodrama."

I suggest putting some more meat on its bones.




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Your right. I will get around to it... Someday. When I feel it! Ya knows?
Thank you! :)



Prometheus, thief of light, giver of light, bound by the gods, must have been a book.
— Mark Z. Danielewski, House of Leaves