Not all men are pigs

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Too bad not more men are pigs. The world would be a prettier place.

But yeah. Too many weird rhymes! I must bash you on the head with a rhyming dictionary or something, because not all poetry has to have ending rhymes. And stuff.

Bwaha, that ending is FUNNY. But vote Obama.

I believe I am one of the non-pig males. While saying this kind of makes me a pig automatically, I don't care cause pigs are awesome.

Far too many weird rhymes, yes.

"Every man has stitches,
Worn with pride, given by witches."
Like that.

Never give me time on a computer and four different types of poetry

Hehe. A very interesting poem, Reyu, but lose some of the rhyme and work on your rhythm. I must say the ending is awesome though and I love the general concept. Hmmm....

Some new evidence in this ageless case.

[Perhaps 'on this ageless case' would be smother.]

Most of all...

Not all men lie.
They do possess an ability to cry.
A man died for all our sins,
which were given to us by Eve.
All women are masters of the weave --
Born only to deceive?

[I think this section is good but if you work on the flow and structure, it could be even better. I'd change that first bit so that you have something like -

'Most of all, not all men lie,
We do possess the skill to cry.
Was Jesus not a man like I?
He died for sins released by Eve;
All women be masters of weave --
Born only to deceive?'

I LIKE IT! Thanks kitty.

No problem, I'm glad I could help.

Reyu wrote:Not all men shower everyday.

You ought to.

I didn't like a lot of this; too many weird rhymes. However, I liked the bit about Jesus, Eve and Hilary. It was cute, funny, and made me laugh. I think the the religious allusions give it some depth that the rest of the poem somehow lacks. I might just work with the last stanza, but not the rest of the poem.

Ooh, I liked this, although sometimes I don't agree with the title. ^^

Men have their good days though. Good work... And sorry that I'm not giving any tips, as I cant think of anything bad to say.

Ooh, apart from the mention of punctuation. That is all.

Hmm... This is cute? ^_~

But, at times the rhymes forced your line to do certain things that didn't make much sense, and so the poem didn't make sense. @_@ Don't lean so much onto your rhyme--first and foremost your poem should give a meaning and make sense, then your rhyming shows up. But don't let the rhyming force your meaning--like in lines like: Worn with pride, given by witches.

Also, what was with the last line...? That's kind of... out of place.

I am ready for a woman president. THAT is what the last line means.