mai poem plzz read and coment!

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My life is very sad.
Because I got a bad critique from Brad (it rhymes even!)
And apparently my poem was very bad
because he told me to throw it away and not start over.
And I couldn't find a word to rhyme with over except for clover
So I wrote this emo poem about leaves.
And talked about how a spider weaves
in and out of its hole.
(that was a bad line. ><)
which is tasty like a sugar bowl
and the sugar bowl is sharp sometimes.
like this poem full of rhymes
and with those edges and rhymes.
And seaweed with brines
I cut myself up, into many lines.
Which has to do with geometry.
or if you think hard, menogemy (might be spelled wrong)
But anyway, Brad totally owned me
So I'm writing him a revenge poem to prove I don't suck as badly as he told me I did and that really I'm amazing because I said so.
Because I'm awesome.
And this poem is amazing.
and I think I'm the most bestest writer ever. END?
YES.
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omgz Das ist so gud!

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...I'm not sure whether I should laugh or cry. Probably both.
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Best writer ever?
Most certainly.

:D
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LOL

I love this! This is perfect!

Amazing, Amazing, Amazing.

...Has Brad read this yet??? :D
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"like this poem full of rhymes
and with those edges and rhymes." - ruined a most spectacular piece.
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I loveth it.
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What has this world come to? :shock:

*bashes head on desk repeatedly*
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... brings me back to the nostolgic days of Smaur's 'THE BESTEST STORY EVVAR!!!!!!' ^_~




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Ah, dear SPEW, who ever knew him well?

If energy and time kept up with impishness, I'd give it a brilliantly, er, impish critique. ^_~
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aaah!You remind me of my brother ConorR, he's on this site too.
I think it is hillarious and don't worry, we all get a horrid review from Brad (shudders) sometime in our lives.
But he doesn't bite (much)
(sorry Brad!)
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