Defeating Galbatorix with help from a Galaxy far far away

Eragon Shadeslayer stands on a hill over looking the Varden camp, when he notices a pair of silver things coming into land. “Eragon, do you see the silver things landing?” “Yeah.” “Saphira, are they dragons?” “No, little one.” “Roran, Saphira and I are going to find out what they are.” “I’ll come with you.”
On board, the Millennium Falcon Jaina Solo Durron and her husband Kyp Durron are contentedly talking with newly weds Anakin Solo and Tahiri Veila about Anakin’s mysterious return from the dead, when a jolt slams them back in their seats.
“Dad, what happened", Jaina calls to her father Han Solo. “Jaina, I think we landed on some planet.” “Is the Jade Shadow all right?” “Your Aunt and brother just commed us.”
“Jania, Kyp, Anakin and Tahiri get ready to go greet some guests.”
Getting her and Kyp’s light sabers she pulls on a light silver jacket that matches her pants perfectly."Ready, Durron?” “ If you are, Goddess.”

Going to the already lowered ramp, they see two men and a dragon.
“Hello, I’m Eragon Shadeslayer and you are?”

“Jedi Knight Jaina Solo Durron.”

“Jedi Master Kyp Durron.”

“Jedi Knight Anakin Solo.”

“Jedi Knight Tahiri Veila Solo.”

“Captain Han Solo.”

“Jedi Knight Leia Organa Solo.”

“Jedi Master Luke Skywalker.”

“Jedi Master Mara Jade Skywalker.”

“Jedi Knight Jacen Solo.”

“Queen Mother Tenel Ka Solo and my daughter Allana.”

“Ben Skywalker.”

“Welcome to Surda, I’m Roran Stronghammer.”

“And I’m Saphira Brightscales.”

“You talk!” “Did you think I was a lizard?”

Just then, Jaina notices a tall black haired woman coming towards them.
“Eragon Elda, I seen you’ve met the new comers.”
“Greetings I’m Arya Svit-Kona ambassador from the elves.”

“Eragon, Nasuada and Orrin will need to meet these Jedi.” “Who will meet with Nasuada and Orrin?” “Kyp and Jaina Durron, and Anakin and Tahiri Solo will meet with Nasuada.” “Leia Organa Solo, Jacen Solo, and Mara Jade Skywalker will meet with Orrin.” “Thank – you, Luke Elda.” “Elda?” “An honorific term for a man or woman of wisdom, Luke you have shown wisdom by choosing people that will get along with Orrin and Nasuada, hence Luke Elda.
“Thank You, Arya Svit Kona.”
“Eragon, you will go to Orrin and I will go to Nasuada.”
“Very well.”
“Jaina, Kyp, Anakin and Tahiri if you’ll follow me, we’ll be there in no time.

“Ms.Solo, Jacen, and Master Jade Skywalker would you please climb on to Saphira and then we’ll be on our way.” “Yes, Eragon.”
“Eragon, how did you get the name Shadeslayer?”
“By killing a shade named Durza, Master Jade Skywalker.

Can you space this out? The spaces dividing up the dialogue are in all the wrong places, and frankly, as it's mostly all dialogue, it needs to be spaced out properally.

-ST

Um, why are there so many people on the Millennium Falcon? Can it hold that many people? And why is Eregon and the others not afraid of a spaceship?

This is supposed to be satirical 'fan' fiction of Eragon. It is here to 'take the pi**' as it were. It serves to highlight the obvious and unashamed similarities between Star Wars and Eragon, and should therefore be viewed neither as canon, nor to be taken seriously. It's made for a laugh.

This is simply an "Eragon-is-a-complete-rip-off-I-hate-this-book" rant. Nothing more, nothing less. The structuring suggests that this was trown together in a matter of minutes, with only enough research for the Star Wars names, if even half of them are real (I'm not sure).

If you didn't like the book, voice your opinions in the book review thread for it like everyone else. You're certainly not the only one who dislikes it. This doesn't even deserve to be called fanfiction, considering the fact that you're obviously not a fan. If you want to make a parody/sarcastic story about the rip off, go right on ahead, but at least put a little effort into it so that it can actually be called a story. Then, if I see it, I'll see if it makes me laugh. I've seen cliche satires before, and I have found them funny. This sounds like little more than a rant. With a little expansion, and thought, I can see this becomming kind of humorous, now that I envision it. How about spending a bit more time on it to make it flow and sound more coherent?

And piepiemann22, the Millennium Falcon was a good sized ship, just had a small cockpit instead of a bridge deck.

And piepiemann22, the Millennium Falcon was a good sized ship, just had a small cockpit instead of a bridge deck.

Off-topic, but the Millenium Falcon had a passenger capacity of around six, and probably enough for a few crew, from two to six. That's twelve at the maximum, if you're squeezing people in, but I'd say it was aiming for around 8 people. Most of the Falcon was holding compartments for smuggled goods, and probably would be considered a small ship in terms of passengers. That's (obviously) not what it was designed for.

No, it is not a rant about how much I hate Eragon.I love the Eragon book and know a little too much about Star Wars. I own eighty-seven Star Wars books and run a site called jainasgirl and I can tell you exactly what book Chewie dies in.
By the way there are 2 ships the Jade Shadow ans the Falcon.

“What is a shade?” “A dark user of magic.”
“Interesting.”

“Who is Nasuada?” “The leader of the Varden, Jaina.”
“The Varden?” “The warders of freedom, Master Durron.”
“The warders of freedom?” “We are fighting against an empire.”
“How interesting my Mom, Dad, Uncle, sister, and brother fought against the Empire.”
“Jaina, are you Kyp married?” “Yes, for about a month.” “Arya, don’t mind Jaina and Kyp, they didn’t want or get honeymoon.” “And we did, Anakin?” “Tahiri, remember we spent it with my family.” “Only because, the force let you come back to life.”
Walking and listening Arya can’t believe this family is for real.
“Arya, we are not crazy.” “We’re Solos and Durrons and this is normal.”
“Normal?” “Every one is force sensitive except, Han Solo.”
“Force sensitive?” “Jedi.” “Interesting, Orrin and Angela are going to have a lot questions.”
“Arya, who are these people?” “Ambassadors from the silver things,Jormordur”
“Greetings, I am Jormundur, Lady Nasuada’s military adviser.

“I’m Tahiri Veila Solo and these kind people are Jaina Solo Durron, Kyp Durron, and my husband, Anakin Solo,”
“Welcome, Nasuada is expecting you.”

Helloooo? Alanna, is it impossible for you to space anything of your's out properally?!

Sorry, but whenever I see anthing of your's, its all squashed up, making it impossible to appreciate, much less critique.

-Shadow

I'll work on it.
Lanna

This is okay.

Everyone is saying this, but you really need to space I couldn't tell who was talking and it is much harder to keep your place.

Also, at the beginning, when all of the Jedi people introduce themselves, I thought it was a bit monotonous. Too many names. Maybe less people could be in the ship?

Sorry about any Star Wars misunderstandings, I'm not too familiar with the movies.

~Pyx

I chech it on word and it's fine.

But it isn't fine on here! Look at it when it's on here, and edit it accordingly! (duh, duh, duh, duh, duh...)

Sorry to keep on nagging, but you've gotta do this to get people to take notice of your stuff! I should know - the first things I put on here were all squashed up, and people told me so in (dare I say it?) no uncertain terms.

-Shadow

Yes, for the love of God, space the dialogue. It's ok if it's paragraphs of description, etc. but we can't tell what's going on here. It's too busy!!

I worked on it!!!