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This is my first NaPo, so please be kind! My goals may change as we get closer to/ through April (I'm a sucker for a shiny badge, so I'd like to try and collect at least one).

It's cliche, but I love poems about the shifting in seasons, so that's what my NaPo is going to try and capture. Tips, tricks and suggested prompts are very welcome. I'm completely out of my depth - wish me luck!




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Omg I love your cover! So pretty, can't wait to read your poetry dear Icy!
You know, ଳjellyfishଳ can't swim or shine on their own, but once they absorb light from around them, they're able to shine for themselves! So maybe...I can, too! If I'm around you, maybe I'll be able to shine, too? -

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ahh thank you @Youbeaucupid! This may or may not come to fruition, but at least the intent is there.




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My candle burns,
ever weaker in the endless night
I cling to its flickering flame
as the cold,
once a beautiful, now a curse
aches my bones and chills my heart

I wait for a spark amidst the dark
A sign of hope
or life
or warmth.
But there is none, only silence and cold
So wake me when the winter ends
And a new spring begins




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Fading candle's glow,
Winter's chill numbs soul's embrace,
Spring's whisper beckons.




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ooooh the season and warmth/coldness themes of your first two poems are enchanting!! i can imagine a candle slowly flickering out as spring approaches :> super excited to read the rest of your poetry this NaPo, Icy!!
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I love the mention of the candle in both of your poems. ^^ Writing of the seasons is definitely interesting and a beautiful thing.

This is my favourite part <3
once a beautiful, now a curse
aches my bones and chills my heart


I was thinking, maybe you could write a poem involving a fireplace or an umbrella, that is if you want. And hey, it's my first NaPo too! XD All the best and you can do it!!




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Your poems! They're so beautiful, delicate and yet so powerful. I can't believe that it's your first NaPo, not when you have such a awesome title! :D Good luck, and I'm reading along :]

“It is always sad when someone leaves home, unless they are simply going around the corner and will return in a few minutes with ice cream sandwiches.”
- Lemony Snicket




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It's always such a treat to see nature and seasons-themed haikus. It's really in that haiku spirit. And I love the personification and the action verbs in yours!
"I've got dreams like you--no really!--just much less, touchy-feeley.
They mainly happen somewhere warm and sunny
on an island that I own, tanned and rested and alone
surrounded by enormous piles of money." -Flynn Rider, Tangled




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So softly whisper when spring ascends
And with new breath this darkness ends




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Thanks for your lovely comments @Spearmint @AmayaStatham @Rose @Ventomology!

I find haiku the easiest to write because of the rigid rules/structure so the themes of nature have definitely spilled over from the way they're traditionally written




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As frost retreats, the earth awakes,
A symphony of life it makes.
Buds unfurl, their colors sing,
Winter yields to gentle spring.

The snowdrops bow, their heads so fair,
Croci emerge with petals rare.
Cherry blossoms blush and cling,
Winter yields to gentle spring.

The sun ascends, its warmth renewed,
Melting ice and solitude.
Robins trill, their notes take wing,
Winter yields to gentle spring.



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trying out some of @Spearmint's list of poetry forms this month, so this is my attempt at a kyrielle




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oooh i like it!! :D it has a delightful rhythm and rhyme to it ^-^ these lines in particular stick in my brain -> “The sun ascends, its warmth renewed, / Melting ice and solitude.” lovely work, Icy!!
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In the quiet of dawn the streets are mostly deserted,
save the bags of rubbish lining the pavement
I weave through them
clutching my coffee to my chest

a beacon against the cold

Birdsong is muffled by the weight of the mist
and rain falls with gentle persistence.

I hesitate on the precipe of day
take a sip
and the liquid burns my tongue



So verily with the hardship, there is a relief, verily with the hardship, there is a relief.
— Quran Ch 94:5-6