(Okay, the story is fine, but the progression needs to speed up. Character development is iffy. I like that Andrea kid, very sassy, love that. literally nothing is funny in this though. It's either really awkward, hella depressing, or romantic. Break. The. Stupid. Cycle. of. Whatever. This. Is.)
(Okay but why did that comment on me give me so much serotonin- thanks Critic-)
(...Okay, listen, can we just- do what we want? We aren’t pro writers, or at least I’m not, I’m doing this in the way that I know how. So can we just do what we need to do?)
Do you how do? I use any pronouns :) Get in losers, we're going napping
