@Noobwriter88 Since hireath claimed next post, you could probably wait until she finishes at least. Really, as long as your post moves the story along you're fine. The rest will sort of come naturally as you gain a bit more experience. You may benefit from waiting a couple posts to sort of see how it's done if you're really nervous, but I would try not to worry too much since Storybooks are usually pretty relaxed.
I'm done Oh and @AlyTheBookworm I hope I got the Danny parts right, I wasn't sure how he used his power and all.... if something needs editing, tell me and I'll do it.
I was eleven years old and I'd lost my mother, and my soul. And the crucible gave me you.
Accepted! I'm glad the team has a healer now, odds are they'll need one.
I think now would be a great opportunity to have Monica join them, since it would make sense that Onyx would have someone hired to bring back a deserter, so I'll go ahead and start on a post for her. I'll try to have it up by the weekend!
If anyone has an idea on how to incorporate Natalia let me know! Also if anyone has any questions about her or the types of relationships she might have with characters
"Sometimes it is the people who no one imagines anything of who do the things that no one can imagine" - The Imitation Game
Just wanted to say that Danny's abilities are less Jedi-mind-control and more that he can influence people's emotions. He can't control what they do or say (until he unlocks his second power), and the target is completely conscious and can even become aware that something strange is going on with their emotions.
Some examples of how he'd use his ability is that he could push on enemies' emotions to terrify them into giving up information or dampen the fear and stress of his allies. Sadly, his voice doesn't have any power to wipe memories or put people to sleep. I guess I'll clear it up when I write a post from his POV.
