Thanks for the info Robusto, I'll try and get a character up soon, but posting may be difficult for me for a while until I buy wifi after my first pay. So I may not be too active for a while.
Dorian, are you the one adding all the spices to our food? Of course I am. Why? Because frankly the food here tastes like poorly cooked sawdust. It genuinely tastes how Solas looks.
I can't remember. Is there anywhere in particular we're supposed to take our characters? Also, I apologize for the delay in my, but will have it up soon. Also, would anyone like to collab with my character?
"What is dead my never die, but rises again, larger and stronger..."
*Ride like Lightening, crash like Thunder*
"Ask me no questions, and I'll tell you no lies..."
@jumpingsheep: Great job with your post! It flows nicely, the characters are all pretty cool, and I love the feeling that the post conveys - kind of reminds me of what I've heard about the Battle of Britain (one of the most interesting battles I've studied in any of my history classes, and the stories I've read that are set during/after it have always fascinated me, too).
On the other hand, though, I have two slightly less positive things to note pertaining to your story: First and foremost, they're called the "Shrall," not "Skall." Secondly, I'm not entirely sure I understand the time frame of the story. I have to assume, based on the way the characters are acting, that these attacks have been taking place for at least a couple of days. However, as I understand it, the Shrall attacked a series of ISN planets very shortly after the Oculus 5 incident; based on this information, the amount of time between the Oculus 5 incident and the attack on Odonai (Hstiv's home) would have to be, at the least, a few hours. The same is probably the case for the other invasions that take place in the story. My point is that it seems that the events of your plot seem to be taking place a couple of days after the initial wave of violence initiated by the Shrall war machine, thus meaning that your post, time-wise, is well ahead of the others. This is perfectly fine, but you have to keep in mind that this potentially means you might not be able to post for a little while, given the most everyone would now be behind you time-wise.
...Of course, I'll have to ask @Robusto about that, because I have the sneaking suspicion that I'm probably wrong on the matter, though I'm not entirely sure. Nonetheless, great post, and the same goes to you two, @Verser and @15253.
@AlmondEyes: No, there is no particular place in which we're supposed to take our characters, as far as I am aware. I suppose that, for now, our first and next few posts will be our characters fleeing from the Shrall invasion and taking shelter where they possibly can.
And yes, I am willing to collaborate with anyone. If anyone wants to collaborate with me, you can shoot me a PM, and we can work out the details. Does that sound fine with everyone?
*looks around* *hears silence*
I'll take that as a yes.
S'io credesse che mia risposta fosse a persona che mai tornasse al mondo, questa fiamma staria senza piu scosse. Ma per ciò che giammai di questo fondo non tornò vivo alcun, s'i' odo il vero, senza tema d'infamia ti rispondo.
@TheSilverFox, you're actually alive!? I seems like I can never get a hold of you, but thanks! xD I'll be wrapping up my post and putting it up very soon.
"What is dead my never die, but rises again, larger and stronger..."
*Ride like Lightening, crash like Thunder*
"Ask me no questions, and I'll tell you no lies..."
@TheSilverFox I fixed my Shrall typo! Sorry about that! As for the time frame, I am a little bit ahead I guess, so I'll wait til you all catch up! I have a lot of work to do this week, so I won't be able to post as much anyways!
Dorian, are you the one adding all the spices to our food? Of course I am. Why? Because frankly the food here tastes like poorly cooked sawdust. It genuinely tastes how Solas looks.
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