Glory Online [DT]

go ahead. Second part should be up by tonight

I have added some dialogue for the Artoma, so just reread the battle scene, @15253. You can then add lore concerning the Cataclysm as you see fit, though don't be too detailed.

huh. I cant seem to find the dialogue.

EDIT: I'm an idiot. I accidently reloaded the page and lost all of my progress O_O
Please excuse me while I cry in a corner.

I AM SORRY ;-;

I know that feeling all too well, @15253...

@Lumi, my addition to the Calamity only manifested as a few lines from the Artoma. Is that enough for our present state, or should I write more?

@15253 --> There's no rush. Two weeks is the retainer bracket for post time, but if you've made progress, the time is extended until you finish. Also, do a few sweeps for grammar and syntax. I'm a picky boss.

@AstralHunter --> Can you quote the lines of dialogue here? Going back to that post is a daunting task. But I'm sure you pass.

@Lumi, of course! Here they are:

Quinlan descended upon the Paladin with tooth and claw, but was forced to take flight again when a mace struck him in the face.

"Begone, uncivilised warmongers!" the Paladin called at the retreating pair. "As savages, you attacked without just cause, but as cowards, you will flee in disgrace!"

Fallyn ignored the AI's taunt (though she was grateful for fresh dialogue) and instead scanned the ground. "Where is the Gnasher n-Argh!"

"We have suffered abuse from worse hands than yours!" the Artoma Paladin jeered. "Our resolve will not waver!"

Revan broke off from shooting at the Gnasher and turned his arrows upon the Commander. Quinlan joined in and flapped his wings, staggering the Commander as well. The sudden addition of attacks took him by surprise and finally broke his resolve. Panic was evident in his eyes.

"We did not endure decades of misery and survive the horrors of the Calamity simply to be slaughtered in a strange land by barbarians! No, we have suffered too much to be thwarted so close to the end!"

"And we outnumbered the Artoma," Revan added, equally exhausted. "The taunts were weird, though. They sounded like fanatic martyrs."

"Whatever their motives, they are to be engaged with caution. For now, I think we can rest for five minutes," Fallyn suggested.

That's all I added, but I could include a conversation of taunts between an Artoma and one of the Guild Members, if you think I should.

Nah, man. Those are perfect. Right on the line between tragic dialogue and practical NPC combat phrases.

I imagine the sentient bosses may speak a bit more, though. So the rest of you: keep that in mind. Don't overkill it, though. We don't want to have them questioning everything until we fight Fedya and actually get placed in the Calamitous Artoma.

As a side-note, what color should the water be on that planet? I'm thinking red or purple. And what about the sky? Maybe it changes depending on the prominent element in the realm--say green clouds for a wind-aspected overlord, etc.

I'm starting to get excited for this again...though I think I'll probably be zooming into the progression of the fantasy story itself instead of the people playing the characters. After all, that meta-story would lead to some weird breaks. But we can still incorporate the meta-story. I'll just work on proportions and let you know what I feel.

I despise it when a notification gets lost in all the activity... Sorry for only responding now.

Anyway, I'm glad that I got to go first, since now I don't have to worry about the future bosses or their dialogue. That new poll is dreadfully terrifying, though, so that certainly causes concern.

@15253, I just read your post and corrected Fallyn's malapropisms ;P, and it was quite intense. I look forward to the boss battle. (The dialogue, though... XD)

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Oh

My

God

WHAT IS HAPPENING HERE?

EVERYONE RESPOND IN CAPS.

HE WONT STOP PLAYING HIS UKELELE. KILL ME NOW

THE ENTIRETY OF THE STORY TAKES PLACE IN ARTOMA SO I APOLOGIZE IF ANYONE GOT ATTACHED TO THE LORE BEHIND GALARI. WE'LL COME BACK EVENTUALLY BUT IT WON'T BE CASUAL.

IF I DON'T GET A POST FROM ONE OF YOU IN THE NEXT TWO DAYS I'M GOING TO DO SOMETHING DRASTIC.