~nariel~

I liked this. It had tons of emotion and drama. Plus, I can relate to wanting someone to stay with me, even if they don't belong. There was scarlet around ...

Hm, I liked the title of this, very unique. I'm just going to critique as I read, so here we go. “This is the worst day of my life,” Cheryl ...

Welcome to YWS! I haven't been on in a while, so I'm sorry if my review sucks. :) The poster above me got the major nitpicks. “I had a dream ...

Hello! You're off to a good start, but I have a few suggestions. All his life he had feared death as a cold, damp plague eating away at a defenceless ...

Nice. This keeps getting better and better. I didn't have any major issues with this chapter, but just some nitpicky things. But it was three months – three long, agonizing ...

I agree, this will be very cool when you draw it all out. =) I think you use the words "the boy" a little bit too much. So either you ...

Hey this was very well written and I loved reading it. I do have a couple things though. I heard the siren’s not long after, but I was already almost ...

Hey, I really enjoyed this chapter and I like how you've made it so original (for a vampire story). =) I simple loathed this, for I had to chase him ...

Hello and welcome to YWS! I'm glad you think YWS is marvelous, because I think it's marvelous too. We have a 2:1 rule on here though. You need to do ...

This was very sweet although it was a little short. There isn't really much here to critique, but I'll do my best. :wink: The beginning didn't really draw me in. ...

I like this! A very nice twist on Little Red Riding Hood. I have a couple of nitpicks. As usual, I could not extinguish the thirst for adventure that burned ...

I agree with niccy_v on what she said. But, I'm glad you enjoyed writing this. :) Show a lot more emotion. Levi may never come back; I should see tons ...

All the posters above me caught your mistakes so I'm just going to go on about how much I liked this. The description was great; I actually felt like I ...

Hello and welcome to YWS. Sorry you're not getting any sleep. On your song: Well, this was interesting. It kind of reminded me of A Little Piece of Heaven by: ...

This was extremley well written and I really liked it. Your vocabulary and grammar are well done, so I don't have any comments there. There are some parts in the ...