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by deleted15

Published November 11, 2008

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~nariel~
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~nariel~ wrote a review Review · Nov 11, 2008

Hello and welcome to YWS. Sorry you're not getting any sleep.

On your song: Well, this was interesting. It kind of reminded me of A Little Piece of Heaven by: Avenged Sevenfold...Very gothic. Some of the things in here didn't really make any sense to me like:

(Verse 2)
Adrenaline pumps
I’ve had enough
From horizontal to vertical
I rise
I hate thou
Now look down thy barrel


???

What does that mean?

All in all, this seemed very original to me; you just need to work on clarifying and maybe making it a bit longer.

Happy writing,

Nariel



Poetry lies its way to the truth.
— John Ciardi