Hello and welcome to YWS. Sorry you're not getting any sleep.
On your song: Well, this was interesting. It kind of reminded me of A Little Piece of Heaven by: Avenged Sevenfold...Very gothic. Some of the things in here didn't really make any sense to me like:
(Verse 2)
Adrenaline pumps
I’ve had enough
From horizontal to vertical
I rise
I hate thou
Now look down thy barrel
???
What does that mean?
All in all, this seemed very original to me; you just need to work on clarifying and maybe making it a bit longer.
Happy writing,
Nariel
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