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This was really good. I really liked how you kept referring back to the insect to help narrate the story, rather than just describing the scene. It made me see ...

This was simple, but really good. I really miss my childhood days as well. Everything was easier back then, like you said. The world seemed much more simple. You were ...

This poem was great. The imagery, everything was well done. It made me run my hands along my face, and contemplate time within itself. I really liked this poem. It ...

This really wrestles with todays problems. You are not afraid to mention, straight up, the worlds problems. This poem is good, because it lets us know what is wrong with ...

This is really good! I also find a close relation to it. Life does seem truly monotonous at times. However, I'm sure it will get better over time. Once you ...

This is good. But, I also agree that your character is somewhat bland. Make some changes to make her a bit more original. However, you do have the works for ...

Alright, so I thought you did an excellent job with description here. You painted a very clear picture in my mind. I also liked the fact that you threw the ...

Alright. The first thing that I noticed is a lack of description. While you do a good job describing the dragon, the piece lacks a background description of the setting, ...

This is really good. I really liked the fact that Drake doesn't remember his past. It allows us to learn more about him as he discovers new things about himself. ...

Well, I'm certainly not going to be as harsh as the first person who reviewed this. Everyone has to start somewhere, and the only way to get better is by ...

You know those old fashioned stories about babies being left on other peoples doorsteps by their parents because they No need to repeat parents can't take care of them for ...

Leaving a place you liked was never easy. I looked around the tiny apartment that had been my home for so long. The brown marble floor looked clean enough, the ...

Wow, this is excellent. I really enjoyed it. Now, I don't usually do grammar critiques. I like to give a readers opinion to the author, not an editors. I really ...

This is good. Apart from a few grammatical mistakes, I really enjoyed this. There were times when you would end a quote with ." so and so said. It is ...

Well... This is certainly an interesting story. There isn't much more I can fix differently from the people above, although I would still like to give you some advice. You ...