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How do they know who the spy is? (i'm sorry kind of lost track there.) It just seems so weird. I don't know how the spy gave away their position.Or ...

Hey there again. Things are starting to pick up again. I liked the idea of a school talent show to lure out a spy. It was good. I think it ...

Hey there again Mm. I like how you got Amanda to betray James to save Stoddard. I wasn't really expecting it because I thought it was over for him.(plus I ...

Ok so this took a different turn. I got a bit confused because I thought that the main character was locked up in the basement.(also I don't think you mentioned ...

Wow this was great. :) I really liked this peice. Though there were just a few things I'd like to mention. Just a few. :) First of all, when someone ...

Hi there! :D This was really funny. I mean, the boy wakes up sees a horse and just grunts and they continue eating breakfast. Then there's all that grunting too ...

hi mm. My first thing got deleted So I'm re-writing this. I listened in the dark as they sang : Listen to the sound of my voice Can you feel ...

Wow :) I loved this chapter there was so much happening. First of all I liked the story line that was going on. The tense mood you created was nice. ...

Hey there. This was an interesting peice althought kind of strange. I don't think you portrayed the mother well. She's behaving like an enemy or someone out for revenge. Yet ...

Hi there. :) This was a funny peice. :) I liked the man who wanted to 'die'. That part where he mentions that he wanted to die, I don't think ...

hey there. :) This was an interesting peice although somewhat confusing. Charecters I think the way you portrayed you charecters was good. The valentine guy especially. Although I'm not getting ...

Mwa ha ha Double 'o' Hei So first of all, good job there! There was suspense from the begining that kept building up as I read along. There were some ...

Hey there! I liked this scene too. :) So you wrote that the girls name is Sarah am I write? Didn't you say in the previous scene that you forgot ...

ok hi there. :) So I got to say that the first chapter was a bit confusing. the 5th part but maybe that was just the old english confusing me. ...

wow. It's me again and I got to say this was better than the first chapter. :) The paceing here was better. It really was easier to follow. You did ...